Falling

A Poem by RaindropsRoses93

Sleep, to far to grasp

Like holding on to the breath in my lungs

My heart not holing the blood it needs

The blood in my veins rejecting my mind, following suite is my brain

Cells escaping their home and giving me no direction

Falling to the floor, my legs refusing to budge

My arms not responding to my desperate plea for movement

My eyes so large and yet I can't so who I am

The tiny holes in the crook of my arm control me

The image in the mirror not showing who I want to be

No more tears to slip down my cheeks, no one to catch me when I fall

In this moment all I have is myself and the girl in the morror.

© 2008 RaindropsRoses93

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Bhavya Kaushik

Ah! Such a deep and sensitive piece...It's having such a raw and true emotions...

I found the piece very well written too, and while I was reading it I was having some images in front of my mind as if like I myself was falling..

"The image in the mirror not showing who I want to be
No more tears to slip down my cheeks, no one to catch me when I fall"

-I simply loved these lines a lot..
Its wounding and deep.

I found the entire piece very much real..because often many of us feel the same thing and same emotions..
So I think so most of us can relate themselves with it.. And I simply love writes like this...

An awesome read overall..
Thanks for sharing it here and keep writing :)

--Bhavya :)

Posted 16 Years Ago

BeautyFromTheEarth93

This is beautiful and so full of raw truth! i really like this. :)

Posted 16 Years Ago

pasdepoisson

This is a stark, beautiful piece. I think the line "The blood in my veins rejects my mind." is an excellent sense detail/idea. I intuitively sense what this line means; it's something I've sensed before, but never articulated in words. A dark, lyrical piece that is not diverted from its central theme, alienation and powerlessness.

You might want to watch the editing. though. The word "to" in lines 1 and 8 should be "too", and the typo "morror" affects the impact of the ending.

Your images and clean and strong, just follow up on technical clarity.