Leaf

Leaf

A Poem by Rainbowco
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Trying to understand and write metaphors. Any suggestions greatly appreciated.

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I am a leaf that trembles
Before the roar of wind
Moving this way and that way
Stripped from the anchor to circle
And, tumble with the howls
Amidst the throw-away litter
Racing down the roadway
End over end, round and round
Unaware, oblivious of danger
Skimming the sterile ground
Coming to rest in the gutter
Where all leaves end

© 2008 Rainbowco


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Rainbowco
Review as you will. Suggestions on writing a poem in metaphor style are appreciated. Thank You

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A leaf on the wind... ever seen the movie serenity, the pilot of the spaceship kept saying that "I am a leaf in the wind"... we are all leaves in the wind aren't we.? good write... luv this

Posted 11 Years Ago


Racing down the roadway
End over end, round and round

I think you've hit it on the head here, as far as writing in metaphor. Reading these lines, for example, I can perfectly picture an autumn leaf, as well as myself, being tossed "end over end" by life itself. The flow and phrasing have a lilt that is reminiscent of a leaf in a breeze. You've done what you set out to do, my friend!

Posted 16 Years Ago



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