The Way

The way you look at me,
Says how much you love me.
The way you say my name,
Fills my heart with glee.
The way you talk to me,
Tells me that you care.
The way you laugh with me,
Says that you'll be there.

The way I look at you,
Tells you I adore you.
The way I say your name,
Shows the way I feel.
The way I talk to you,
Gives you an idea,
Of the way I'll keep you in my heart,
Always and forever.

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

I just wrote a review for your burning poem. Again in this poem it shows another contradiction. The first four lines of the poem sound like some creepy stalker is looking at you, and its making you feel extremely nervous. The rest of the poem is great though. It shows the love that you have for who you wrote the poem for. Just the first four lines feel out of place with the rest of the poem.

[J. Elsie]

Like the true romantic that I am I want to feel this poem flow through my body and remind of all the times past when I felt this way about another. Unfortunately, I think that some of the lines ring a little too trite and untrue. "The way you say my name, gives me chills throughout my body"... Does it really? I think it would be amazing if this were true, but I think it happens rarely and if..only in the beginning of a relationship. And if it is the very beginning, then certainly you cannot say you will love this person forever, unconditionally.

I am not saying these things to put down your writing. I think you have such great emotion and fierce love and you probably are a fantastic friend and partner, however, I think with writing you have to go above and beyond what others have said a thousand times. To do this you have to say the things that haven't been said. "The way you look at me, sends shivers down my spine" has been said repeatedly and its sweet, but hard to fathom.

"When your sights set upon me, and your gaze refuses break, I wonder what it is you see that sparks you so. To think you see me bare, through my guards, through my walls, leaves me vulnerable and shivering with want."

Take those feelings that you're so obviously wanting to share and elaborate them. Explain them in ways that others can understand rather than just accept because they've become cliche. You've got the stuff. You've got the drive. Make it better. :)

[Ares]

I loved it! It was very sweet and soulful, and is the perfect way to tell someone exactly how you feel about them. Wonderful Poetry