Numb

   

 

     What can you do when you feel numb

 

    How can I laugh when I have no emotion

 

Feeling as though I'm stuck under someone's thumb

 

      I cant get in motion like the ocean

 

         Times telling me to move on

 

    Though life has me frozen in the past

 

         Even though my past is gone

 

        I've been declared an outcast

 

      They say time can heal anything

 

    But how can I heal when I cant feel

 

 When feeling numb is all I'm remembering

Author's Note

A lil poem don't know if its good or not?

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

This is a good piece. It really pushes the emotions into the words. Numbness...that oppression of the past and the fitfull walk down memory lane, it serves a purpose for us humans. It gives us an opportunity to take a long look at what we've been through and find the learning lessons from the events, be them bad or good.
Remember that no matter how society pushes you, this way and that... you've always got the opportunity to turn your gaze upon new roads and begin a new path. Nothing wrong with change for the better.

Great Ink! Honest and expressionful.
Aaron

[ashesonfire]

Very nice piece :D I love how this is a very relatable piece. I believe everyone has felt this way at one point or another in their life. Very wonderful piece.

[Cody Williams]

It was a pretty good poem. You picked something that everyone can relate too. Good job!

-CW

[Playing with Demons]

It's a good poem. Numbness is usually associated with heartbreak or loss but this one is different which gives a new perspective. There is a slight brush on humor when you say "Feeling as though I'm stuck under someone's thumb"
BTW I lived in Alabama!!!!
When all the doors close you can crawl through the grate ;)
Cheerio

[Karl Woof Junior]

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Needs a rewrite...


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[The Flame of the Knight]

This poem felt like something everyone can connect to in one way or another. And the use of rhyme sort of tied the whole piece together.
Rating- 95/100

[Mike Cole]

I think it is good. I think we all know what it is like to feel numb and not to feel. Me personally a lot of the time during hard situations I try to block out my problems and hope to feel numb that is what your piece made me feel. I really like it Keep writing!

[jvava]

This is very good.
This poem is universal, which every writer should hope for. I feel the same way at times: numb.
Grammar is great, spelling is good.
I like this poem a lot! Keep up the amazing work! :)

[Nick.B]

Interesting poem, I can relate to this in many ways, that feeling of numbness when there is nothing left....great job

[ayosonolowo]

Nice poem, well done...........

[Justaguy]

Just wandering around and came upon this. REALLY nice! Its deep, but easy to read. Very well done!