Love

   

 

                 A mother's love liberates- Maya Angelou

 

 

    Anika slowly turned around with the most frightening expression on her face. Chocolate cake hung from her silky brown hair, and rage blazed in her baby blue eyes. Honestly Michelle was just as mad! Anika's little frame shook, and her California tanned skin looked paler. Michelle searched Anika's face with her own blue eyes. Just trying to guess her next move.

 

    

  "I'm going to kill that blonde headed wretched b***h!" Anika yelled running at Carry. Anika jumped over the table like a tiger and tackled Carry to the floor. Once on top of her all Michelle could see was Anika punching Carry. Which was pretty awesome if she might add.

 

 

   "Get off me you freak!" Carry kept screaming. Students began to circle the event, teachers began to notice what was happening, and well Michelle was laughing harder than she's ever laughed before!

 

 

   "Don't ever do something like that again you b***h!" Anika yelled with a grin planted on her face. Hec, she was proud of herself, Michelle was proud of her to! Today was probably the best day of Michelle's life!

 

 

   "Anika Heart! Principles office this instant!" Miss. Grady yelled. First day of school for her and she's already getting suspended. Michelle couldn't be more proud of her new best friend! Carry had a black eye, busted lip, and her nose was bleeding. What a great day!

 

 

   "I'm never going to hear the end of this when I get home," Spencer muttered.

 

 

   "Oh, well it looks like our fun has come to an end," Michelle frowned at him. Carry will probably go home and tell all about how I put Anika up to it. Twist the whole story around so she won't be the one at fault. Then Spencer's dad will probably forbid him to even talk to me.

 

 

   "I guess its a good thing I don't give a f**k what my dad has to say," he smiled at her.

 

 

   "I guess that is a very good thing," Michelle winked. For right now she will just flirt with him and let her feelings grow. Michelle doesn't want this new found courage to make her into someone she's not.

 

 

   "So, I guess its time for last block," he smiled pulling on a piece of her red hair.

 

 

   "I guess so," she said as he looped his arm through hers. He walked her to her last block class and she thanked him before he walked away. She knows he's a bad boi and all. But they all have to change sometime don't they? 

 

 

    After a long lecture on linear equations the bell rang. It sounded like beautiful music to her ears. She walked out to her locker to put her things up, and prince charming was leaning against her locker like a bad boi. His black hair made him seem like a fallen angel. Though those green eyes held so much mystery and secrets. So much depth.

 

 

   "What do you want looser," she teased. He held her books while she opened her locker.

 

 

   "Wondering why this pretty little fireball standing in front of me is playing so hard to get," he answered handing her books back. Michelle closed her locker and looked up at him.

 

 

   "Because I hardly even know who you are," she told him.

 

 

   "Then let me drive you home, and I'll tell you anything you want to know," he suggested standing up straight. Which made her feel so short. He probably stood at six foot three. 

 

 

   "No can do. Maybe in a year or two," she teased.

 

 

   "And why not?" he asked getting serious.

 

 

   "I don't get in vehicles with strangers," she smiled walking past him.

 

 

   "I won't be for long," he told her as she walked out the door.

 

 

   When Michelle got home everything was in an uproar.

 

 

   "Why aren't yawl asleep?" she asked them.

 

 

   "Something horrible has come to everyone's attention," Kevin answered with a yawn. What could be so bad that everyone's up out of bed running around like this?

 

 

   "Mom, what's going on?" Michelle asked insisting on an answer. Her mom sat down on the sofa with the most worried look in her black eyes. Her mom was beyond beautiful. Weren't all vampires suppose to be? Beautiful to make you like them, strong to take what they want, fast so you can't run away. Her mom was at least one hundred, but she looked barley thirty. She had strawberry blond hair and a slim figure. He father was the complete opposite with his dark black hair and crystal blue eyes. Opposites attract don't they?

 

 

   "I don't know what to do," her mother said to her father.

 

 

   "What's going on!?" Michelle questioned once again. Her father looked over at her and smiled.

 

 

   "Michelle your home," he smiled.

 

 

   "A slayer has been sited here in Wasteville," her mom finally answered.

 

 

   "You mean a vampire killer, right?" Michelle questioned horrified.

 

 

   "Correct," her father answered.

 

 

   "Do you know who it is?!" she asked frantically. The mansions block walls were beginning to spin all around her.

   "It's a girl that all we know," they answered. It could be anyone!

 

 

   "You need to go lie down. Your turning a shade of green," Kevin told her taking her hand.

 

 

   "Good idea Kevin," she smiled as he helped her to her room.

 

 

   "Kevin if you find out anything inform me please," she said getting in bed. He smiled sitting down on her blue lazy boi.

 

 

   "I will but you really shouldn't worry yourself to death. There's one slayer and a house full of vampires," he reminded her.

 

 

   "But the slayer is dangerous," Michelle told him.

 

 

   "Mom doesn't hate you for not being a vampire," he said out of no where. It shocked Michelle.

 

 

   "Every time she looks at me Kevin I can see the disappointment in her eyes," she said wishing her red mop of hair was covering her face.

 

 

   "She said it's her fault your different from us," he said getting up.

 

 

   "How?" she asked as he sat next to her.

 

 

   "Mom said a doctor gave her shots to make you a stronger vampire. She said you were dying in her womb and she didn't know what to do. The shots made your heart start to beat. Then when you came out your heart was beating like a humans, and she knew you would never be a vampire. She thought about putting you up for adoption. Not because she didn't want you, but because the doctors told her a human does not need to grow up in a house with vampires. But she loved you so much that she couldn't let you go. She doesn't look at you with disappointment. She's disappointed in herself for ever treating you like your not hers," Kevin told her tears gleaming in both their eyes.

 

 

   "I don't know what to say," Michelle whispered tears streaming down her pale cheeks.

 

 

   "She loves you Michelle," he added a tear escaping from his blue eyes.

 

 

   

Author's Note

Ik its short but I tried... this picture is Michelle's mom:)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well. I like the situation at the school. Her new attitude is a lot better. Now you added purpose and plot. A vampire killer. The story is getting better. A book can be 500 pages. I like the pace of the story. You give enough to hold the attention of the reader. Thank you for sharing the excellent chapter.
Coyote

[RainDancer1997]

I'm glad you like it:)

[Angel]

Oh, my! I just had to go back and read the rest of the book-in-progress...and, WOW!!! A human kid, born of vampire parents? I don't think I've ever heard of such a concept (and though you may not have guessed, I LOVE vampire tales. Ann Rice is one of my favorite authors, and I have two of the movies from her vampire series on tape.) I am intrigued.
And the plot is deepening. There's the guy, Spencer. Is a romance developing? And the new friend, Anika. What a little scrapper! Carry surely bit off more than she could chew, there, didn't she!
And developments at home. A "slayer"? Oh, no! Could it be one of the kids at school? Carry? Too obvious. Spencer? Doubtful. Besides, this "slayer" is new in town, right? OH NO!!! Anika? Michelle's new friend?
You've got me hooked, young lady. I want more!!!!

Only problem...grammar and sentence structure. You seriously need to work on those areas. The story is A+ fantastic...but the poor grammar and the sentence structure throw it off. Just needs a bit of editing to be a WINNER!!

[Pam]

I like that this chapter is longer. Well, Carry finally got what she deserved! I like Anika's personality; sounds like a chick I would hang out with :P. I have the feeling that Anika could be the slayer, but that's just my guess.

[J. A. Lucero]

Wow this chapter is packed full of entertaining dialogue! The situations you set up at the school and at Michelle's house definitely kept my attention. I've said it before, but you really do have a talent for drawing the emotions out through dialogue :) The only thing is I wish there was more description on the what was going on in the school and home scenes because when I was reading it, it seemed so exciting though the dialogue and Michelle's thoughts that I wanted more description of the physical aspect to paint a better picture. That could be a personal preference, but maybe you could consider it :) And don't get me wrong I'm loving the story so far :)

[RainDancer1997]

I always accept advice:) and I've already got more chapters posted and I'm trying to be more descriptive within them:)

[J. A. Lucero]

Cool :) and I'm definitely gonna check out the following chapters when I get a chance :)

[Sharon Kim]

I like this chapter. You've given some depth to Michelle's mom and it will be interesting to see how their relationship develops now that Michelle knows how her mom really feels.

I really liked this exchange of dialogue:

"What do you want looser," she teased. He held her books while she opened her locker.

"Wondering why this pretty little fireball standing in front of me is playing so hard to get," he answered handing her books back. Michelle closed her locker and looked up at him.

"Because I hardly even know who you are," she told him.

"Then let me drive you home, and I'll tell you anything you want to know," he suggested standing up straight. Which made her feel so short. He probably stood at six foot three.

"No can do. Maybe in a year or two," she teased.

"And why not?" he asked getting serious.

"I don't get in vehicles with strangers," she smiled walking past him.

"I won't be for long," he told her as she walked out the door.
You showed a lot about these two characters in this exchange and the dialogue was very natural.

The word boi threw me too, as it did some other reviewers. Because it is slang, one suggestion might be to spell it as boy when used as a description and to spell it as 'boi' when one of your characters is speaking it. Just a thought.
Great job, I look forward to reading more!

[RainDancer1997]

I'm glad you liked it:) And I'm going to use your suggestion on the boy boi thing:) Thanks and theres a new chapter called clearer than before already up:)

[Silent Wolf]

First, you didn't tell me you posted a new chapter! Second, this was really good! I like that it's longer than the others, but it did move sort of fast. I felt that there was multiple spots where you added enough detail and few where you didn't, so good job at that. Still a few tiny grammar errors, but it's okay. :) Worth 100 points anyways. :)

[RainDancer1997]

aaww thanks:) I wont forget next time promise lol. Thanks for reading:)

[Silent Wolf]

Welcome! :) And thanks. :)

[Christopher Angel]

You're improving :) Just work on adding more white space between paragraphs and single lines

[RainDancer1997]

Ok:) thanks for the advice:)

[Prritiy]

though i don't want to spoil mystery but still the vampire slayer is Anika Heart!
it seems so....

[RainDancer1997]

:) ur smart

[Prritiy]

thanks :) your story made me :)

[Prritiy]

still interesting as ever, just as everyone says a little thought to grammar.

what is 'boi' as in -He smiled sitting down on her blue lazy boi.

[RainDancer1997]

It's actually boy but for some reason I always spell it boi

[Prritiy]

ok so it was i guess like this -He smiled sitting down on her, blue lazy boi.

[RainDancer1997]

yes it is:) haha