Hurt

 

 

      My world crashing all around

 

    Rage has built its thundering sound

 

     The hurt I feel it kills me now

 

    It takes me whole and swallows me down

 

      Been hurt a thousand times

 

    My heart has survived a hundred crimes

 

     Feeling lost, don't wanna be found

 

To be wrecked again, to be looked at like a clown

 

       Tied up bound to this world

 

      Shangled up high and curled 

 

      Only ever wanting to be free

 

 But hurt and struggle has bound me to lock and key

 

       Down, down deep inside

 

      In my heart there it hides

 

        The wanting to love

 

        The wanting to see

 

  The wanting to be what I can never be

 

    In my mind I'm stronger than ever

 

  In my heart I know it wont last forever

 

    The little girl with a broken smile

 

   Her heart wonders for a million miles

 

  What's a life worth if it isn't spent living

 

   I don't know if I wanna be forgiving

 

             The way I am

 

             The way I act

 

   Is from a soul that's been cracked

 

     Piece by piece it's torn apart

 

 All that's left is a beating heart    

Author's Note

first poem

Reviews

[The Flame of the Knight]

This is an amazing poem for it being your first one. I found it hard to stop reading to be honest. And i rather enjoyed the use of 'shangled', i thought it was clever. It feels like something very relateable to most people, and that is hard to do sometimes with poetry. Thank you for sharing

[h d e rushin]

congrats on you're first........trust me, many more will follow...it's an insatiable itch that no one
else can scratch......good, honest work..
dana

ps. I was in Alabama once. It was hot..

[RainDancer1997]

haha yeah its pretty hot rite now, but you just learn to live with it I guess lol

[zainul]

You look very promising.
Congrats on the outstanding beginning!!!
This line is worth a great quotation:
" What's a life worth if it isn't spent living"

[B-poet]

A very deep and profound type of poem. This could've been a cool 2 or 3 part type of write as well. It's very well written all throughout though. Great work. An intriguing read. :)

[Christopher Angel]

I loved this. Your first poem and it was so good. Straight from the heart and earnest. Made me feel like giving you a hug and letting you cry on my shoulder. Okay, I'm being creepy but the words made me feel that way honest!

Great job!

[RainDancer1997]

Haha it's not creepy lol and I'm glad you liked it:)

[Christopher Angel]

haha good that you think so!

[AgeRN]

Wow...the line: my heart has survived a hundred crimes...WOW so powerful.
Love it..such raw emotion captured.
I relate, I relate I relate!
Nice work.

[RainDancer1997]

I'm so happy you like it and can relate to it:)

[Mizo4]

nice job, i like the raw emotion, feelings that a lot of people can relate to, it reveals misery and frustration effectively, a powerful nice poem

[Revery]

We writer to purge. I don't know if this is a personal write for you but it's obvious you felt it with your heart for yourself or someone close. Great job

[RainDancer1997]

Thanks you for reading:) and commenting lol

[Revery]

Your welcome

[shallimarRose]

First poem????????? Are you kidding me? this is fantastic..Full of hurt, regret and inward strength. I would have guessed you had been writing quite awhile...... You better keep writing ... xo shallimarRose

[RainDancer1997]

Thanks a lot:)!