Hidden Sadness..

Are you listening to me? Are you listening to my shouts? My screams? My cries? I'm Like an erupted volcano next to you but you don't seem like you give a damn. . All the feelings that's bursting from my damn chest, but you just sit there, reading your silly book You don't move or even try to look at me It's like you have no clue that all this is happening right next to you But wait, you seriously have no clue I took time to realize, that this is all happening inside of me!! I sit in front of you calm, very calm, but on the inside I'm tearing apart All screams and shouts are inside me.. Oh well, that's why you never noticed Funny, very funny

Reviews

[Norah]

Powerful poem, good job I like it :)

[Tricia Pattinson]

A good poem on exploring self. Looking from the inside with all the inner dialogue and emotions which is invisible to others (most others). Smiling at your realizations!

[Moonie]

This one needs some punctuation checks. But on the bright side, i found the emotions pretty palpable, and the message has been conveyed very well.

[Jennie Baron]

I agree with Renee about correcting some of the punctuation and grammar. I also think breaking this up into lines would make it flow and make it easier to read. Otherwise, this makes quite a good point about people being oblivious to what is going on around them and ignorant about others' emotions.

[ReneeJ]

I could sense the passion and the emotions. It made a wonderful read, because the persona was tearing apart, and it made the readers (me) feel so too. I enjoyed this very much. Keep writing!

**I noticed a few punctuation and grammar problems, edit and the readers won't get distracted
crys--cries
thats--that's (but you could omit it and keep all the feelings bursting....)