Dominatrix

my muse is a dominatrix
it's true
a sugar-thorned flower BLACK
with pistil-whipping eyes that undress me
regress me
till all i can do is suckle the leather bound teats that
inspire and nourish
and with a flourish of whip-sharp wit she bites me
rewrites me
excites me with pain
my plain jane keeper of chains
the train of her gown is my funeral shroud
'cause breath without her eloquence
her straight-edged razor elegance
is flatlined-discorpeal consonants and in that sense
i'm already dead.
~so it's a good thing she's a necrophiliac
she's my /sadistic/ savior
my "christ-with-a-c**t"
with candy-striper canings that are raining down redemptional
blows
and i owe her everything
my life
my art
this submissive heart
this unfulfilled part
MAY I NEVER BE COMPLETE!
but grant me taste of the virgin's monthly blood
MAY I NEVER BE CONTENT!
but promise me placement at persephone's feet
MAY I NEVER KNOW LOVE!
but bed me in sunsets finger painted by GOD
MAY I NEVER ACHIEVE MY DREAMS!
but let me your poet
at least let me be that...
surrendered in your sugar-thorned arms of pain
and acceptance

Reviews

[Inmate 72866]

I was afraid by the title that I was going to be serenaded by that same pornographic s**t from that woman who wrote "You f*****g tease." I'm happy to instead find a very literate and thoughtful piece about creativity and our inability to control it. I feel the same way. Right now I am hot to trot, but I always fear the day when the drought hits. This is beautiful friend, truly and I don't use that word lightly (at least I don't think I do). Anyway The pleas in caps are so poignant. This was very moving.

[Bethany Wong]

I love
'rewrites me'
and the way you've incorporated rhyme to elegantly into free-verse. This is so fantastic; I love it.

[Staci Brown]

"christ-with-a-c**t"

YES!!! love that line!!! and i love any writer/poet willing to push past the barriers!!!

i also love the whole Dominatrix theme. well done :)

faerie blessings...

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

and with a flourish of whip-sharp wit she bites me
rewrites me
excites me with pain
my plain jane keeper of chains
the train of her gown is my funeral shroud

perfect just so goooood...the internal rhyme kicked just slammed and vouz boulez, baby. vouz boulez.

metaphorical star quality. this is how a provocative piece should be written.
all the usual string of powerful, magnificent...etc etc etc

you know, this must hit the air...

sincerely
ilene

[Shannon K.]

Wonderous. Your words flow so easily and bring great imagery....to my head. This poem sounds as if it is painful, the pains of love, or what you think is love; believed to be is love. The ending, where you state what you will give up in order to have this sweet knowingness of "love", is brilliant. You have laid it out perfectly.
Great job!
S.k.

[Invisible Ink]

Well written and evocative, creative yet twisted. This is one of the best I have read on here. I look forward to reading your other work.

[Christina Marie]

I read this outloud and felt the intensity, the raw emotion in each word. . .This piece is extremely well crafted. The words, a constant roll off the tongue. Each phrase so dark you can't help but be spellbound. . .

Bravo darlin'!!

[Juliet]

Whew! Titillating, fascinating. I have to say, I let it sit in my in-box for quite a few days because of the title. But I know your writing is professional and crisp; just wanted to get in the mood, so to speak. :)

Very well written. Can't say I'd change a thing. May I borrow her for awhile? She sounds enchanting :)

ps: love your use of 'pistil-whipping.' It's all quite genius, really.

[D. R. Wilsey Jr.]

This is simply great. Wonderful job. The images are very vivid and powerful.

[Leah Simone]

"christ with a c**t' your savior - this was unique and dark, yet compelling - I liked the way you are a slave to your muse - her monthly virginal bleed and how it feels as if her "femininity" her ability to give birth to your words, etc is the magnet - you cannot create without her you and willingly accept hostile demands in hopes you may be accepted or at least freed to express some internal rage that reflects the sting of her whip - I am not sure writing feels quite so dramatic as all that, but I will say - reading something so intense - feels pretty damn good - Leah

[J.P. Bristow]

"this submissive heart
this unfulfilled part
MAY I NEVER BE COMPLETE"
.....the total power exchange......you had me shackled to this.....and that requires special skill.....