antlers and apartment living

walking my chihuahua next to a field and the wildlife that sometimes stops to stare back at us.

slender velvet

quivers

 

head adorned with defensive fractals

turns cautiously contemplative

 

the black bar fence

borders between

my monthly shelter

and his diminishing realm

 

field and tree

morning yawns heavy with summer

and we stare down

through the spaces

till we are

snapshots

 

of civilization

and freedom

Author's Note

does this make sense? i'm highly caffienated so maybe not. lol.

Reviews

[Reika]

hmm. I think it makes sense in a way.

"field and tree
morning yawns heavy with summer
and we stare down
through the spaces
till we are
snapshots

of civilization
and freedom"

I like that. The picture it paints in my head, and the things it makes me think of...
I think I like your highly caffeinated writing very much
=)

[Emily B]

There are slices of brilliance here. Like 'monthly shelter'. Clever and contemplative and also low key to have been highly-caffeinated.

It's always a pleasure to read your words.

[Gandré]

this is unbelievable, how coherent our thoughts are. I posted a second ago something what was the same thought, with different words. I loved "head adorned with defensive fractals"--- it is like a self chosen prison, I loved the way you said it.

"the black bar fence

borders between

my monthly shelter

and his diminishing realm" -----------to me this is like the ritual with oneself of taking another temporary identification. wonderful.


The last 2 stanzas...to stare back till one is a snapshot of the civilisation and freedom.. hmm I felt this morning like my wanting of being the freedom of my civilization with him, where ever he is; this was haunting! making the reader believe, he can have it, too...when travelling backwards. to the beginning of everything.

[Staci Brown]

lol yes it does make sense! great contrast between the wild and free and the structured world... nice imagery. would have enjoyed reading some perspective from the eyes of your dogger as well tho too :D

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)