our journey

this is an older piece that has been hiding away in my hardbound journal. it's about the road trip i took with my current fiance when we first met. since today is valentine's day i wanted this to be the first poem i repost. a rememberance of what we share

as night descends upon cubicle city

i slip back into the comfortable memories where it was just you, me, and arizona asphalt that spun under the wheels of our hearts. i remember familiar landmarks taking my breath and stealing my wonder to your lis so that you could savor my speechlessness.

 

i close my eyes and i am there

at the edge of the abyss with you listening to ponderosa pines roar softly like an invisible sea. nature held us close like a mother filled with pride. i remember getting high with you under a star-filled blanket, warm and open and feeling so alive.

 

but mostly i remember you. your energy. your kisses. the way you made everythihng fascinating again. i remember your hair, your eyes, your hands and the different ways they got tangled up in me. i remember our words making love before we embraced in the flesh and i remember thinking that i didn't deserve you without feeling like i was being cliche.

 

you keep hope alive in my heart even as our memories date us. your words still inspire me to stop settling for my insecurities. your touch has always pushed past my false ego. your laughter continues to break down the walls of my angst.

 

and i love you.

i love you. if i were to dedicate a thousand words to our journey together the opus would still climax with those three potent words, because for all of the miles that have marked us, and all the tears that have divided time, and all the promises that we're still unsure of how to keep. our lives have grown closer and we are both beter for each triumph and tribulation.

 

i love you baby. i love you so much it scares me. but not as much as the thought of a life without you in it.

 

-for beah

Author's Note

not really looking for critique on this as it pretty much perfectly articulates how i feel. still though your thoughts are always welcome.

Reviews

[Angelheaded Hipster]

And thus it is with love, and having the ability to capture it so nicely. Its not overdone, but its powerful in the sentiment.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

gorgeous. i really don't know what to say. glad i found your work, glad i read this piece. :)

it's going in my favorites.

gorgeous.

[Anne Martin]

I love most of this. I think you use "I remember" a little too much in the third paragraph/stanza. This straddles the fence between poetry and prose in a satisfying way.

[Emily B]

Lovely and flowing and true. The earlier poem I read intrigued me and I came back for more. I'm so glad I did. Your writing is the kind that I enjoy. . . the kind that I pass on to my friends.

[April Child]

This is absolutely beautiful. I couldn't critique it if you wanted me too, it's just perfect as it is.

but mostly i remember you. your energy. your kisses. the way you made everythihng fascinating again. i remember your hair, your eyes, your hands and the different ways they got tangled up in me. i remember our words making love before we embraced in the flesh and i remember thinking that i didn't deserve you without feeling like i was being cliche.

you keep hope alive in my heart even as our memories date us. your words still inspire me to stop settling for my insecurities. your touch has always pushed past my false ego. your laughter continues to break down the walls of my angst.

sigh....

[Haden]

you had me at "cubicle city". this is a lovely tribute.those memories could be the opening scene to a box office hit. of course, in the movie there'd have to be some conflict, hmm, i suppose you'd have to invent conflict ... i digress, beautiful dedication, she's a lucky girl.

[Tara]

wow...i know that you say you are not looking for critique and i wouldn't want to tarnish this touching piece with any, but i am so moved i must comment. I wish I had written this. I've been married for 16 years (we met when we were 15 and 16. ) and your words resonate with me. It is those trials and tribulations that make us stronger and you reminded me of this at a time when I needed to be reminded. Thank you so much for this poem. I feel it was like a gift to me.

[Tania Leigh]

I don't think I could critique this, as it appears to be written straight from your heart....it automatically rates 100% with me. This is just beautiful, and this phrase especially: "i remember our words making love before we embraced in the flesh"

Excellent, honest, candid piece.....glad you posted it. Your fiance must adore it!

P.S. What else is in that hard-bound journal? More excellence, I am guessing....