Promises

Oh! Can you stop for a while?

Just hear to what I have to say.

I would never expect you to,

Listen and after it wait.

So when the day passes by,

With my voice sailing past your life.

You would have something to,

Smile a little more about.

Coming back to my point,

I would be clear and concise.

Though these thoughts when spread,

May cover a hundred miles.

Some days have passed by,

No stretched promises so far.

Come when look again,

I never even expected a start.

Now I can’t stop the rain,

But I can stop your tears.

Oh I can’t fight the fire,

But I can fight your fears.

Don’t tell me to catch the stars,

All I can do is catch you falling apart.

So when you find yourself alone,

Trapped, unable to find a path.

Just look behind again,

You would find my form afar.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

I dont even know if this one even makes sense. Still, feel free to leave a review

Reviews

[costa siwale]

It has the elements to give the readers a sense of meaning, I got it in, I understand and its well written. keep it up

[John the Baptist]

This one has the sound of a relationship in the throes of frustration. The speaker's desire to help is counterbalanced by a sense of helplessness. The fire (anger) and water (tears) imagery highlights the speaker's frustration. In the end, all he can do is be there. Perhaps that's all he ever really needed to do. Insightful work.

[Wayfaring stranger]

Our lives are fill up with lies of logic and norms. Real life cant be never explained by logos or by any dogmas. Real poetry must be chaotic and unlogical burning edges of fake civilizations. We were born to gain experiences and realize there is only one true in our minds. Other explanations just try keep us in slavery of obedience and following patterns without asking. You write great piece of poetry. Cause anybody can give own meaning and experiences of what they life .

[Elli]

I always get vibe of high stakes from your poems, And I love that.
My criticisms on this poem are that I would like to know what this person means to you, Why you are there to protect them, That would bring so much more emotion into why you're protecting them. Anyway good poem! ❤️️

[angel]

Sounds as though the person writing this is waiting in the wings, ready to catch the star of the show if he or she falters and falls.
When you find yourself alone,
trapped, unable to find a path.
Just look behind again,
You would find my form afar.
There; do you see Raghib? There to save and protect you, there to give love that is unconditional. That's what I feel when I read this.

[wordman]

i can`t stop the rain,but i can cure the pain

[Raghib]

well maybe we can never cure pain. Its just that we can stop the tears of somebody.
Thank you again Wordman

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Davidgeo]

Making overt sense in poetry is overrated.

Abstract thoughts tend to terrify most of us. But we all love to try and make sense of them... it helps kill the time while we travel these 100's of millions of seconds we spend traveling (usually in place).

Living barely makes sense beyond eating and f*****g... it's all abstract madness after that.

[Raghib]

I won't even allow myself to start on the meaninglessness of life. Its true that we humans have a tendency to bring out some meaning in everything.
And Thank you for dropping a review

[Giulia King]

Things are not always going to make sense. Sometimes, words just come out and I'm happy they did. Unexpected thoughts and words are what makes poetry so beautiful.

[Raghib]

That's so true and Thank you for dropping a review!

[Najam Us Saher]

It makes perfect sense to me and you have wonderfully expressed your feelings. Your words captured my attention right from the beginning and it did till the end.

[Raghib]

I am glad it makes sense. Thank you for coming here and dropping a review. And ya,I have been fine. Just dealing with a writer's block. How have YOU been?

[Najam Us Saher]

I am good. Thank you.
It was my pleasure reading this. Good to see you again.

[¿]

Things that make no sense are keeping alive the things those make sense....
Well promised! :)

[Raghib]

That's true. Thanks for the review Tahsin!