Unanswered

Its a question I have asked that has still remained unanswered .

Theres a calmness in being deserted,
Some ardent glory I have achieved now.
It is a call to the demon inside,
Yearning for a moment to be free now.
It will bring the days of your misery,
Showing you the lies of the world now.
How you were fooled all these years,
These plastic faces make you cry now.

"Live a life", they all cry,
But why do I want to die now.
Am I not strong enough,God ?
I wonder why dont I call to you now.
As a child crying for his teddy,
Logic snatched my belief now.
How was I being fooled all these years,
My urge to pray makes me laugh now.

Theres a calmness in deserting something,
Those hopes dont get you high now.
I do not make wishes anymore,
My actions do speak for me now.
Little do I know, Oh! Pity me,
A cursed fate waits for me now.
How will I trudge without faith,
Was God born of such desperate hearts ? (Say ? )

Author's Note

I missed the rythm of the poem in the last sentence . Please ignore that !

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

This is the story of a religious crisis that apparently goes unresolved. The speaker is one who has deserted religion but now feels trapped after the world has failed to provide satisfaction. Desertion is a major theme in this work, the speaker stating that there is great calmness in both being deserted and in deserting. Possibly he feels calm because the last desertion atoned for the first one. Still, it all ends pretty bleakly.

[Coyote Poetry]

You asked serious questions in the poetry. Death and life. Two different directions. Death I final and living is possibilities, Thank you Raghib for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Raghib]

Thank you for your review Coyote . Your reviews are something I look forward to

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Raghib.

[R.E. Ray]

Your poem gnaws at the gut and conveys the deepest agony, a blackness that swallows us when betrayed by someone we loved, who we thought loved us. And, it's worse for the religious because our commitment was based in part in a deep faith, a vow perhaps to stay together forever. So, we question everything, including God. And, it's not until we spend some time alone in the "deserted" space that we realize life isn't always beautiful. Still, we go on, and some grow and write about it. Nice work!

[Raghib]

Thats so right Robert Ray . Thats very right !!

[wordman]

sad and beautiful,we all have visited here

[Raghib]

Unfortunately I made it my home

[wordman]

time to move my friend

[Mikku]

Beautiful one...loved it..

[Raghib]

Thank you . Just a question . Is your name Mihika Mishra . I had a friend by the same nickname . I am confused ! And you looled a lot like her in your previous profile

[Mikku]

No,that's not my name😅...mikku isn't even my real name.just a name used for writerscafe

[¿]

But sometimes it's hard to recognise those plastic faces. Reason is the answer and you gotta search it! 👏 to your great question.
- Tahsin. Z

[Raghib]

You will find a lot of plastic faces friend . You grow and learn to recognize it . Its something that nobody can teach.

[anonymous_at]

to be calm in under pressure in great.....i think it somewhat shows a growing person who is leaving behind his past ad childhood.....overall I loved it... :)

[Raghib]

Thank you ! I may be falling but at least I am growing ! Yes . I am leaving things behind. But at least I am growing !

[anonymous_at]

Well that's the spirit.....
But to be honest I can't find that no matter how hard I try....read moreWell that's the spirit.....
But to be honest I can't find that no matter how hard I try....
Good
Great going....hope u remain calm and poised ND reach to the heights of the success.....
Luv
-A-

[Stephanie M]

Excellent. I liked the way you conveyed your feelings about the abandonment of not having your prayers answered. I especially like the line, "These plastic faces make you cry now."

[Raghib]

Dont get me wrong . My unanswered prayers were never the reason . As I have mentioned - "logic snatched my belief"

[Avia]

The rhythm is very nice and it is a nice poem. You know what I'm going to say already. I believe what I believe as the way you believe what you do. And i have learnt that only truth can change belief and I pray you see the truth. As for your unanswered questions about God and faith, I say, if we can't understand God because He is God. I must say, I enjoyed reading this. You write well, keep writing.

[Raghib]

Yes. No one can change what one bwlieves in unless they want to change it . Thanks for your visit Avia . And thank you for your appreciation !

[Elli]

There's an uneasiness from this poem, I'm picking up on that you changed some how after leaving something behind you.

[Raghib]

I leaved faith behind me . I stopped believing in a God who watches miseries and yearns for the pleads of humans