Yes you do fail, And you have been known for it . A stardom achieved, By the mistakes of a written destiny . Yet you expect for remorse, And you pray for it every night . But even the shooting stars have shown, A deaf ear to your pleadings . You have been deprived of success, And yet you are still working for it . The staff of your belief , Never failing to make you rise again . Yes you do fail,
Powerful and worthwhile words shared.
You have been deprived of success,
And yet you are still working for it .
The staff of your belief ,
Never failing to make you rise again"
The above lines. Hard way to go and they are true. Thank you Raghib for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
to live against all odds and to find a hope when you have none is a way of warrior.... :) true picture of a warrior in just a few lines..... I like it!
Yes you do fail,
And you have been known for it .
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I'm afraid that a great deal of the story here remains in your head, leaving the reader with no context.
Who fails? No way to tell. Who asked the question? You don't say. What did they fail at? No way to tell.
Certainly, you're not talking to me. So who is it addressed to? To them it would have context and be meaningful. But to someone who just arrived, I need more than dramatic words. I need that drama to be attached to something that has meaning to me—either provided by the poem, or by its pointing to the context that exists within me..
A blunt, truthful message for all who will read your words. Strength, hope, and resilience are themes that shine through your poem, and a bit of "tough love." I especially like the warrior references and divine admiration. Impressive piece.
A powerful and beautiful poem! I adore the way your words play with my mind, and the way you make me see the world behind the gaze of honesty. Everything requires work- the import thing is that, although one might fail boundless of times, one should never give up. Because that, is what kills the soul- the understanding of having quit- even though one could have kept going.
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6 Years Ago
Yes indeed . This js what makes them a warrior. And I am honored I could make an impact because the.. read moreYes indeed . This js what makes them a warrior. And I am honored I could make an impact because the world has forgotten reality because of their obsession with fantasies which they believ with their idealistic sights. I do want to write pieces of literature that have an impact . Not thisethat are merely pretty words . Words that are written to be accepted . Just to be accepted . No, I dont want to become one of those writers.
6 Years Ago
I know what you mean. The world is fascinatingly connected to what is not real. However, I do believ.. read moreI know what you mean. The world is fascinatingly connected to what is not real. However, I do believe people need a balance of the two. Because, although reality must be our primary focus- our imagination and our dreams, is what helps us move forward as well.