Look Mother !

How a caring mother cares,
For her child to be all safe.
Away from the darkness,
She holds him secured to her breasts.
But cant you see the obvious,
In order to stop the evil,
She confined his own world .
And now he is trapped ,
In an unlit room of affection .
A place to be nurtured in,
A haven to reach out for,
When things go wary .
Look woman!
No matter how strong you can be,
You cannot go on forever.
Look what has your possession done,
It created chains unbreakable .
For today the same child stands,
Blinded by the truth .
The world is not the same,
As was shown in his euphoric chamber .
I watch him go in running ,
To wear those binds again .
Hoping you would keep him,
Close to your breasts today .
But you are sound asleep ,
Lost in your own blissful heaven .
Never to be woken again,
Even by his agonized screams .

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

I am moved, heart touching poem.

[Raghib]

Thank you Najam . glad to hear from you

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Bear]

Critique: A question for you, why do you have a space between some of your words and the punctuation?

Review: I found this an interesting topic but felt that you may have left some of your thoughts out of the story. There has to be a reason for the fear of this evil which is unknown to we your readers but it seems clear to you. I wish to know and understand that fear and envision that evil. I am not saying I don't like your poem, I am saying you left me wanting more, I want you to consider rewriting this and give me a stronger picture of the fear and evil that you have in your mind :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Raghib]

the spaces are typo , nothing else . and I have left an option for the readers as to what they think of that evil to be . it can either be the cruel world, or death , or their own interpretation

[John the Baptist]

There is in truth but a fine line separating a shelter from a prison. Very nicely done.

[Raghib]

Thanks for the visit . keep visiting