Ecstasy

And under the starry night,
The two lovers bloomed with pride .
The male aura watching,
Ecstasy deflowering his light

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words. Made the situation come alive. Thank you Raghib for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Geodan]

It is short and sweet. Nice poem!

[JayG]

Only a man would write about being "deflowered" as being ecstasy, I think.

That aside, I'd drop the first word in both L1 and L2.

You can only use "and" to include where there is choice or to continue, and you're not continuing or including. And in the case of L2, why limit it to "the two lovers," when we've not been introduced to a particular set?

[Avia]

I like reading short poems that paint beautiful pictures. This is one. well done

[wordman]

it sounded like you made love !

[Raghib]

No . Trust me . I am just 16 😂😂😂

[Raghib]

Honoured that you could feel it in my words

[chhimijiks]

nice poem.could have written more to give complete picture.anyway nice poem.

[Najam Us Saher]

I like the scene you have created with your words. This is different from your other writings. Beautifully written.

[Raghib]

Thank you for the review . Yes i have tried writing something else than what i usually write . Glad you liked it

[Najam Us Saher]

I really liked it, wonderful creations comes up one when writes different than their usual, I am sure you will surprise me by writing more. You are most welcome.

[Bear]

Nice imagery, I can see is grow form a seed into full bloom flowering into the ecstasy of your poem. You should check the spelling of your title it should be Ecstasy. I really enjoyed reading it Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Raghib]

Thank you for your review Bear . Have been waiting for you to review my latest poems . Please do visit . And thank you for the observation . I had typed it in a hurry .

[Bear]

I haven't been taking read request for a few weeks as I had family in the hospital in dire straight for almost a month so it is going to take me a long time to catch up and it being the holidays will take even longer so bear with me :~)

[Raghib]

sad to hear that . i pray your problems get sorted soon .

[Giulia King]

I love this poem!! Magical and oh, so, beautiful!

[Raghib]

Thank you for the review . Glad you liked it Giullia