Slice of Pious

Ever felt this: religion has numerous loopholes, seems more

Than the trousers of lonely priests making infant poop-holes sore

Pope goes and puts on a tour

Visits his salivating souls who adore

Charging for tickets and salvation on the door...

Reviews

[F. Nazarov]

The fact that people attempt to buy "salvation" is stain upon our species; we are some gullible folk, indeed. To elevate one person above the masses due to "godly knowledge" he can't really prove he knows... The modern perception of the holy, a God of hypocrisy, and the current religion(s) that embody it fit so well together. Religion is (and always has been) terminally ill, but it's always at moments like these that people cling to the dying the most in a frantic effort to revive that which they cherish the most and do not know how to live without.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Well said.

[Samith Pich]

omph - that last line

*chef's kiss*

[Ramé]

Ah yes. I’ve never been one to subscribe to the notion of sin so I appreciated this little ditty rather well. Choo choo sheep... the guilt train is waiting....

[TL Boehm]

formidable. and unfortunately true in many religions.

[stephen dillon]

great use of language to add some humor even if it's a tad dark but all around this is just a very exciting poem with so little words involved another example of the mastery of your writing

[stephen dillon]

really nice

[Bad Poetry]

Religion is just something to put your beliefs in. this shows hat it isn't more than that. beautiful.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Thanks for your review.

[Emily B]

love the title

and the air of brevity, hits u in the gut