Excremental Pride

What we produce,

perched upon white porcelain,

are unaided achievements.

They should be weighed, examined.

Named.

Author's Note

Does the title work as a clue, or give too much away? Thanks.

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Nope, you perch "upon" something, not "into" it.
Ah well, three years gone by haha.

[Alex Lifeson]

The title definitely gives away the content. But it is short and to the point. Never thought of naming them. Though I have thought of other things. :)

Don't you mourn something more when you name it? Wouldn't it make it harder to flush little tommy down the toilet, never again to see him?

Nice poem.

[Spoken]

title and wording is perfect. I love what you've done. it's so hard to say so much with so little... onlythose with true talent can achieve this. Well done! Thanks for sending me your 'word crap' lol

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

No way! It is perfect for the poem. I am curious what the lasts ones name was. That would be a clue as to how you are feeling today.
Love All, Mejasha

[Shalini R]

funny - yes.
but mostly bizarre
"into" instead of "upon"
crazy stuff youve got going on here

[O!]

hahahaahhha.....lets leave the weighing, examining and Naming (labelling) to the lab technicians!! hahahahha :-P

yes......one achievement, which gives instant satisfaction......so like the title!! he he he....proud to unaidedly achieve great results!! :-P

hahahha.....i think the title adds to the humour :-)

x,
O! :-)

[Kevin Connolly]

Unaided achievements - thank God. Wouldn't it be horrible if somebody had to lend a hand every time we wanted to...?
Weighed, examined, named... they only do that with the work of major artists.
"Nice" one, C.

[Kevin Reader]

What an allegory to something so refined!

Let's go forth and fertilize the earth together. Wouldn't that be swell?

[Crazy Cat Man]

its gross

[lostintheworld]

How true-

Nicely said...