Earth [I]

They were right about this planet,

you know: ‘tis a flat-screen

and we droop across its landscape

like the dregs of a 3am house party

[idly picking at cardboard and

sucking burnt cheese from its nails];

exhausted but triumphant to be awake

in unnatural light. Dim glow

buzzes through the ashtrays and grease

and our stares are those of zombies

or babies, unable to support our own skulls

or do anything constructive without

being prodded. Disaster strikes and

we swap it for the more digestible

colours of cartoon energy; continents

could crumble and we would merely

change channel. Doesn’t the entire West

[secretly] wish for an international remote

control, so that we could point – zap – and

silence the constant violence; the senseless;

the too-complex; the it’s-all-our-fault-I-guess;

ourselves…overall, this big global mess?

 

Author's Note

When will I cure myself...this habit of dissolving into rhyming preachiness is very annoying.

Reviews

[MoonlitAngel]

Woah. This was amazing... But it rhymes? Should I reread it? Lol. It's very very good, and don't worry about how you write it. It's best the way it comes. From the heart. This is something that is very... Serene in some ways. I mean, one way you look at it, it seems rough, harsh. But then when you really understand it, it's very peaceful, just with tons of questions not being answered. Or a bunch of answers without questions. Which there wouldn't be any need for the questions, as long as they are being answered.... If that makes sense? Anyways, this was extremely good. I mean... Blew my mind away. Your a great writer.. Don't stop writing!!

--Blood

[E.W Brown]

Wow I loved this one, you have absolutely nailed it how the world is today and that is a dying shame. The flow to this was just perfect, I really enjoyed it.
Thank you for sharing .

[Alicante lullaby]

i think all the world wishes for such a remote...we are just not genetically built to carry the guilt on our shouldrens..
i always love what you do...

[Desert Dreamer]

I'd like one of those magical remotes...but I may get carried away with such power and "zap" away too much. But seriously, the is great writing, I am glad I found my way here.

[Tony]

Actually, It doesn't matter if it rhymes.....
'Disaster strikes and we swap it for the more digestible colours of cartoon energy.'
As usual, your stuff is dope.
You must be rich. LOL

[run vs remember]

Nice thoughts, I really like this. Great array of words. Favorite line: "our stares are those of zombies
or babies." So good.

[zig]

ah man, i like this, it keeps slapping me around, i like poemks that hit. love the wording in this one, great tempo, great feel. feels like a performance piece to me, a big voice and lots of fingers flying around. great work my friend... as always.

zig

[LJW]

Preach on.

Poetry with a message is the best kind.

[Hedra Helix]

Dude when you cure you can you come over and cure me next? Ill f*****g hang a chicken bone from my nose under the full moon if you tell me too, geeebus.

Still, you are slick and right on, I can't fault ya cos I dig reading ya so dang much, so there. You serve the meds in a sugar pill of good s**t.