Chapter Two

 

 

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Author's Note

This chapter seems a bit redundant. Let me know if there's any aspect of this isolated life that you feel the reader should be told about/shown. Thanks. Critique it harshly, please.

Reviews

[mick weller]

I'm thinking this is futuristic... but at a time when people have reverted to superstition as a more reliable form of survival than religion and/or science?
But interestingly I find that within `superstition` the high Priest Hill is corrupt...? (but I may be wrong?)
`we all march underground` - this is a good ploy - What goes on underground? I'm left wondering...
okay this could also be about a cult/sect...

[L.V. Ana]

This chapter doesn't seem so much redundant, as...missing. There should be more of a tie between the last chapter and this one. Or, alternately, give more of an indication that this is a whole new scene. Other than that, it's really good, and it leaves a person wondering where they are, what kind of world are they living in? Is it an alternate world, with its own rules? A futuristic world, where things have to be heavily guarded? Or is Hill some creepy man who's keeping them hostage from the real world and they don't know it? Very intriguing. Very good writing.