T w o

The both of you

arouse in me,

hot blood,

primitive gallantry;

 

a cold-minded killer

who left mercy in his other jacket

 

pistons through your attackers,

 

slaying in a dizzying

dust cloud

of violence.

 

 

Principles

on which I’ve criticised

grief-stricken parents

and ignorant

 

paranoia,

magnetise and zap

my brain

 

until all that remains

is the pumping

 

of limbic strength and fatal fists.

 

------------------------------------------

 

There are a few

I would die for

without question

 

hopefully people

I would die for

without introduction

 

but only

t w o

would I kill for

without hesitation.

 

Author's Note

My girlfriend and my gran.

Reviews

[V]

We don't like to see those that we love come to any harm what-so-ever. This is a powerful, emotional poem which touches on that raw essence that is inside, that maybe we wouldn't usually show anyone. I like how you divided the poem into two. Nice work.
V.

[F**K]

wow. love it. very deep

[October]

This is so sweet.

You organized your thoughts very well.
Thanks for sharing.

[Haden]

i really like this ending! it shows tremendous humanity in you that killing for someone would be a greater sacrifice than dying for someone. that is truly insightful. great thought process, great write. (and thanks for answering the begging question at the end ... way to think ahead)

[Emily B]

I understand. I've wondered a time or two if I wouldn't be tested on my resolve. I can't see why you would call it badly written. It's wonderful.

[Bubo]

I get the feeling reading your words that this is how I feel about my children, if they are hurt by someone I become so insanely violent inside that the colours explode, and yes without hesitation I would kill for them, I thought this piece was very thought provoking, and in some ways very dark............for these feelings we have no control over at all.
I thought the second stanza summed it up powerfully........always love your work.

[Rain]

I thought this has got to be one of the most bizarre poems I've read. I read it, again, which is when I saw "My girlfriend and my gran," and then I understood why I felt something on the first read. Now, if I read this right I understand the pure violence. There are several loved ones that could turn me into a cold blooded monster, if I thought their life endangered. A killer without remorse of any kind. If I'm misreading this, I'm upping your dosage.. :) I liked it. Rain..

[eli mercuree rue]

so i keep
coming back

to see if i was added to the list of people

and i havent
and that blows
munkey balls

haha

but
yeah

the first time i read it
it was dry
like my mouth

then i read it again
and i was like
whats missing

this
time
i actually
like
it
enough for you not to delete it


yeah
i like
i do

kill kill kill

ah yes
blood
and rice
tis good
when one
is hungry

im hungry
i could go for some

maybe liver and chocolate ants

hmm

pondering

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I like the sentiments, and it is well...slightly erotic to me, but then again, I dig on sex and violence....

I do believe there is huge potential to this...it seems like there's something lacking though...I don't know what though...