Night Angel

a thing of dreams, a angel near the sea

Midnight shadows reflect in my eyes

Visions of shivering angels revealed before me

Taken into my open arms to be free of sorrow

Distant night cry within these arms of a kings grasp

Whisperer of our fates indulgence

Take refuge here in the kingdom I call our home

Laying here on the edge of time teetering away

On a place where two dancing lovers of a shadowy embrace

May seek a home on a ocean where the tears may fade away

Distant cries of love fair song riding the thin waves

Of that which I call are midnight dream;

Unknown thing of stories untold

Hold onto me now as though nothing could harm you

Sweet dove cry free lay ur burdens on these resting shoulders

Fear not this shadowy night of forsaken empyness

I carry you into this reality of a lovers trance

Tearful eyes look at me

Release these tears I free you of with a kiss to reflect my soul

White reflection that cover us both into this kingdom by the sea

I cry for that which lay in my resting arms

A restless thing of dreams, my dear angelic.

Reviews

[Lyra H]

Love it...brilliant poem!

[ShanZ-Turn]

very nice wording and flow. you are painting a wonderful picture. However it's still a bit fuzzy, this could be a great write, i would suggest working on it a bit more there are some changes i can suggest right now,

L9 - I would remove the may after tears, as you opened the line with the same word it is almost like a stutter when reading it
L11- is that "are" supposed to be "our"
L15 - a typo on emptiness
L19 - White reflection that cover us both into this kingdom by the sea - it seems that either reflection should be reflections or cover should be covers

I hope this was helpful.

[Aamna!]

wonderful poem... it flows well and i think its cute :)