Glass Fall

Something I wrote for school a few weeks ago.

Silver, fractured streaks of pain

Shimmery rainbow of emotions

Trapped inside droplets of broken rain

 

Red rimmed emeralds shining with light

This trickle of a waterfall,

A little piece of humanity in this night

 

Broken glass makes streaks of fear

Glimmering proof of the invisible

And I just see beauty in the tears  

Author's Note

Tell me what this makes you think of.

Reviews

[jonah]

hi, Rachel! I came back to your profile today and found this piece and...great poem! I really really like it! :) I could feel the brittle, little nature of the poem and you built it with tender hands. the colors, sounds, shapes, loss of shapes, everything was well written on this short piece. compared to Things I'll Never Say and My Flawed Perfection, this is my favorite. sorry if I sounded rude in My Flawed Perfection, but I just didn't really enjoy it hehe.
and about the content of the poem...to be honest, I don't really understand. this one is really personal. well, what I got is a painful yet strong effort to embrace the suffering inside. but, I'd be glad to listen to your explanation about the emotion you put within this poem. anyway, great work!

[jonah]

hi, Rachel! I came back to your profile today and found this piece and...great poem! I really really like it! :) I could feel the brittle, little nature of the poem and you built it with tender hands. the colors, sounds, shapes, loss of shapes, everything was well written on this short piece. compared to Things I'll Never Say and My Flawed Perfection, this is my favorite. sorry if I sounded rude in My Flawed Perfection, but I just didn't really enjoy it hehe.
and about the content of the poem...to be honest, I don't really understand. this one is really personal. well, what I got is a painful yet strong effort to embrace the suffering inside. but, I'd be glad to listen to your explanation about the emotion you put within this poem. anyway, great work!