So Sorry

The saddest apology you will ever make

I'm sorry that you're always on my mind.
I'm sorry that it's for you I cry.
I'm sorry the truth you had to find.
I'm sorry I didn't sell you a lie.

I'm sorry I can't destroy this now
I'm sorry I can't kill this flame
I'm sorry I just don't know how
I'm sorry I can't keep playing this game.

I'm sorry your name is written on my heart.
I'm sorry you give me wings to fly.
I'm sorry I’ve been yours from the start.
I'm sorry I want nothing more than you and I.

I'm sorry you can't see how beautiful we could be.
I'm sorry if this hurts you.
I'm sorry you could never be happy with me.
I'm sorry, but this kills me too.

I'm sorry your music cuts my heart like a knife.
I'm sorry for the things I have to say.
I'm sorry you're the light in my broken life.
I'm sorry that it's come to this day.

I'm sorry these feelings kill inside.
I'm sorry being with you heals and destroys.
I'm sorry I'm losing my mind.
I'm sorry you're not like all the other boys.

I'm sorry I gave my heart away.
I'm sorry I ever cared.
But I'm more sorry I can't stay.
More sorry this passion isn't shared.

But thing is: I'm sorry cause you want me to be.
Sorry you're afraid of this fire.
Sorry you won't let me go to infinity.
Sorry you're scared of this desire.

I'm sorry you're all I care about now.
I'm sorry I can't start over new.
I'm sorry you've won my heart somehow.
But most of all, I'm sorry for loving you.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

Very enjoyable.... I feel the same way a lot of times in life... just sorry for a lot of things. Thanks for sharing

[spaghettihands]

"I'm sorry you're the light in my broken life" was the most powerful line for me; I can really feel the significance the object of the poem had in the speaker's life.

[J. K. Beach]

Rachel, I'm new to your writing, but I love the true sentiments and the carefully crafted rhyme structure you have used.

I do think that the use of "I'm sorry" to start almost every line takes a little away from your other words. Maybe you might give the reader a chance to catch their breath by limiting the repetition to every other line or even to once a stanza. You might use a conjunction to connect the first two lines and the last two lines with an "I'm sorry" for each pair. I believe this might make your other words have more impact... more complexity and less of a staccato feeling. Some seem to like the repetition, but I think most readers can get the point with a little less of it.

That being said, I still have to say that I am enjoying your writing. I've mostly read just some of the poems, but I hope to read some stories soon. Is the 250 page book you wrote at 11 years old posted here? That's quite an accomplishment for any age.

Take care, JKB

[Coyote Poetry]

Had the feel of a song.
"I'm sorry you're all I care about now.
I'm sorry I can't start over new.
I'm sorry you've won my heart somehow.
But most of all, I'm sorry for loving you."
I like the twist and turn in the emotion of love and need. Love and need make the best poetry. I liked the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The StoryTeller]

Wow, that was really good, and I know (I wish I didn't, and I wish you didn't) what you mean by this, how you feel... That's why I'm scared to show me, to trust others now, because people I love, that I care about, that I take off my masks for, they don't like it, and they can't take it, etc, etc. And then I have to be sorry and hide how I feel inside, and I have to act like it's all okay and it doesn't affect me... Sorry, I kind of ranted there.... Great write. :)

[The StoryTeller]

Despite how saddening and true it is.

[The StoryTeller]

But some people just aren't meant for you. There is someone out there that can take you, just as you are, flaws, imperfections, glass mirrors, confusion, messed up world and all.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I loved this piece. was REAL!
Sure allot of people cold relate.
This was straight from the heart, I feel the honestly, the heartache, the pain, emotion and depth in this piece.
This piece sounds so poetic, because of the line you keep repeating.
The last line was a great way to end it :)

[Jamestown]

I agree, the last line says it all, thanks for sharing:(

[Lizardo]

A lot of sentiment going on here
But it's true
The last line, oh God I've been there
Good poem!