Don't Scoff My Unquelled Rebellion

Totally off the top of my head, and totally didn't go where I thought it would.

 

Skies full of drear

Crisp, not clear

The flags are flying

Slowly crying

 

Nature reflects my heart

Slowly coming apart

My mind will not hold

What my eyes have told

 

As you take your leave

My eyes do grieve

My heart I can’t quell

My mind will rebel

 

Without you my life is crazy

My life before became a bit hazy

My mind has rebelled

My heart lay unquelled

 

I’ve found my relief

My way from grief

In thinking of you

Of what you do

 

I’m so much better off

Though most may scoff

But they don’t know how few

My days were with you

Reviews

[Rachael]

This is really good.
Even though it didn't go where you wanted it to, you did a good job.
The way I interpret it, I can relate very well.
Nice job!
~Rach