Pathetic

We are but pathetic and strange

As hopelessness is rearranged

Doubts casting a murky sky

And questions forming; why

Pathetic longing fills the air

Longing for our hearts to finally share

Shedding on us a bright white light

As emotions we try to somewhat fight

Somewhat, the perfect word there

For pathetic we are; too soon we care

Pathetic dreamers looking for joy

Curious at times, of a possible ploy

See pathetic we are, we trust so fast

Our hearts the prize, the die is cast

Taking a breath praying for luck

Maybe this time Cupids arrow stuck

Love and understating is what we long for

Since when does it have to be such a chore

They say soul mates show when least expected

Hearts and souls meld together forever connected

Pathetic we may be to believe this to be true

As we search for a future of forever “I Love You”s

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Oh Rachael you just made my day.....I can relate to this very much.....Your expressions of the mind and heart are just fantastic....The poem speaks of like a person to me....Truly amazing....The last line is absolute class......Thumbs up mate......All the ratings.....

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you so much friend. I am glad that you liked it so much. :)

[Chris]

Seems "Love" may also be part of the American Dream...

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Just damn beautiful. Hits me right in the heart this one! Beautifully written, poetic verse with a fantastic rhyme sequence.

And yes, today i am pathetic☺

Fine work, Rachael.

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you for your kind words. I am glad that you liked it.
It's okay to be pathetic every now and then. Good luck!

[alifeacoustic]

Beautifully captured Rachael. We are all those same hopeless and pathetic fools, believing that just once, it may just be true and we have found the real deal. It's the nicest kind of hoplessness to aim for. And just out of sheer scientific or mathematical chance, one of these times have to work out.
Beautifully expressed.

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you, I agree it is the most wonderful kind of pathetic a person can be. I had a lot of inspirations with this one, someone I was talking to that day... The word pathetic came up a lot and I couldn't help but to write of it, thinking it would make for a good write.

[sheandherself]

Wow, this is great. I agree with you and you made a good point. Loving this, very well written.

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you so much. I have come to really like it too in the short time since I have written it. I am glad that you enjoyed it.

[Great Aunt Astri]

The repetition of 'pathetic' certainly makes a point! You express the feelings of yearning very well. It sort of reads like a song. I enjoyed the poem and was left wanting to wish her 'good luck'!

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you so much for your kind words :) I am glad that you liked it!