UNTITLED

UNTITLED

A Story by Rachael Lea

Drip, Drip, Drip. I am alone. It is dark as night and all I feel are rocks, no wait, boulders. They reach up all around me forming a dome like structure that I cannot see. I only know it is enclosed around me because the night sky, or daylight or whatever the time of day it is, is not visible. I reach out in from of me feeling the big rock like structure. It is massive in size with a jagged surface that does not seem to cease. There is no escape for me. It smells of wet mold and dirt and every now and again I test my surroundings, I find there is a stream of water cold as ice. Where is this water coming from? It smells of mud and muck, and causes me to shiver from just being near it. I am afraid to drink it not knowing if it is safe, but I am afraid to parish as well. Except for the constant drip, drip, drip of the water, silence surrounds me, not even the sound of scurrying from bugs greet my ears as I continue to search for where I am. The massive rocks forming an arch all around me are packed with dirt from years of standing, yet they continue to hold true to their form, or have up until now. Crash! Thud! Boom! The boulders or rocks or whatever they are begin to fall and crumble, knowing I have to get away I step my cold bare feet into the stream that the drips of water have created. My feet are numb from the cold the instant they are submerged and as I am running with my hands in front of me trying to escape. my lungs are on fire and even if there was a crack of light anywhere I would not be able to see due to the tears streaming down my face. God I hope that I am dreaming, please let this just be some horrible nightmare, because if I am truly awake then my fears have come true. I am isolated, completely alone. Splash! Clank! Ker-Plunk! "Somebody Please! HELP!" I scream at the top of my lungs as the raging water from above come rushing through the dome sweeping me off of my feet. Coughing and sputtering my calling never stops, if anything my calls are more desperate "HELP ME!" I am drowning now, fighting, fighting to be heard or seen, or something, but nobody hears me. I am alone and greeted with the light of day (it is day) as my lungs run out of air. The last images imprinted on my brain being that of the beauty that surrounds me in the horrible death.

© 2015 Rachael Lea


Author's Note

Rachael Lea
I wrote this three years ago and just ran across it today as I was going through my book of poetry. I remember the night so well, I remember how alone I felt. It obviously still needs some work but I am not sure as to what exactly I am going to do with it.

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I can feel the sound of dripping water, the loneliness and the mysterious thoughts that are passing through my mind....The background is very beautiful yet very intrigue....I loved the description and the way you created the atmosphere of loneliness with your own experience of that day....Great work my frnd....Hats off to you.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Panic stricken thoughts suffocating a beautiful mind, more real than real, but unsure if dream or waking nightmare. Can feel the dark and damp cloying at me as I read, walls closing in and no senses alive to help. Powerfully written, with the reality, or unreality of it being our own worst nightmare.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

Thank you, When I sat to write this I had no idea what was going to come out. When I finally shared .. read more
alifeacoustic

8 Years Ago

Well I'm glad you did. :)
I can feel the sound of dripping water, the loneliness and the mysterious thoughts that are passing through my mind....The background is very beautiful yet very intrigue....I loved the description and the way you created the atmosphere of loneliness with your own experience of that day....Great work my frnd....Hats off to you.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

amazing! very descriptive and captures the lonelyness very accurately

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
what an illustration you just created inside the mind of individual is truly impressive hope that no one should go for legal if any got death instantly reading after this story ['m just kidding sir for this instaneous death case].... Hats off sir!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

I don't know what to say except thank you. I was in a very dark mood that day and knew only pen and .. read more
anonymousprankt

8 Years Ago

great sir, thats the power of pen and thoughts....its pleasure to meet yaa.
Rachael Lea

8 Years Ago

A pleasure to meet you too

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