The Wind

The wrinkles in your clothes

the whispers in your ears

the wind is so bold

yet so clear

when not understood

such a temper she can throw

when  she is calm and happy

she is found dancing on your bow

the wind, such a beautiful thing
providing us the songs
the angels sing
The wind brings bliss
everywhere she goes
you just have to see
what it is she shows
So next time you find
you are complaining of her
remember not all is ugly
see the beauty, her allure

 

Written By:

Rachael Lea

2010

Author's Note

I have progress since I wrote this and plan to tweak it within time

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

A beautiful thought, beautifully captured. The wind that howls is also the wind that brings you everyday sweetness and joy, found in the most unusual and simplest of places. Those thoughts can be all the difference it takes to reign in the tsunami in our minds, for the briefest glimpse of beauty, all the more beautiful for its sudden and unexpected call to you. Beautiful words indeed.

[Rachael Lea]

be it storm or sunshine nature is lovely

[alifeacoustic]

It is indeed. :)

[Melissa Lynn Keeling]

I love this just as it is! I could feel her tug ever pushing yet pulling me in :)

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you that is so nice to hear. I just keep feeling like I could make it better

[Willard Wells]

Nicely done piece with a nice concept for your work. Well done.

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you so much. I feel like I can still make it better but I am glad that you enjoyed it.

[Willard Wells]

These two lines are the only ones I was not comfortable with, but not enough to comment, but this may be the change you are looking for. I still like it.

"she is found dancing on your bow
the wind, such a beautiful thing"

[Rachael Lea]

I will tamper with it and see what I can come up with. Thank you for being honest and letting me know what threw you off. I appreciate it when people can do that to me. I love constructive criticism.

[Willard Wells]

I think I held off in mentioning it as first since you had mentioned a rework in your notes. Have a great day.

[Inject Positivity]

Is it written in 2010? Awww!!! Lovely....I think you have shown the two parts of the wind....I loved the way you compared the wind to a girl....Superb....

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you :) I thought the best way to describe wind was as a female because of how the wind is, you can honestly compare female emotions to wind itself

[Inject Positivity]

Oh yes absolutely....Female emotions are nearly similar to a wind....I really like your thoughts and how you present them in your writings....

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you. Writing is far easier than talking to people. At least from my experience.

[Inject Positivity]

"writing is far easier than talking to people" wow! You made it a beautiful quote frnd....