Dust

I wrote this when I was 14, deciding that God doesn't exist, and that everything my family and friends believed is wrong.

On a field of dust and sand
Blows a gust of wind
Dust covers the land
From the dust forms a child
And from the child grows a man
And the dust in his eyes hinders his vision as he stares toward the sun
But the light from the sun he cannot see, so he turns his back to run
But as he turns he can feel her presence there
And he drags his fingers through his hair
When he can't decide if she's really there
Because he's blinded now and it's hard to trust
When your heart is made of dust

On the field of dust and sand
Another gust of wind
As far as the eye can see
All the dust becomes a child
And the child becomes me
And the dust in my throat rusts my voice as I sing out to the sea
But the sea hears only a static sound so I turn my back to leave
But as I turn I can see them gathered near
And I feel a rush of panicked fear
When I shout to them and they cannot hear
Because I'm choking now and it's hard to trust
When your heart is made of dust

On the field of dust and sand
One last gust of wind
And as the wind is passing through
From the dust is born a child
And the child becomes you
And the dust in your mind stops your thoughts as you gaze up to the stars
But you can't remember your reason to live so you slowly fall apart
But as you close your eyes you can hear us march
And someday you won't be so in the dark
But you can't remember just who you are
Because you're falling now and it's hard to trust
When your heart is merely dust

Reviews

[L.G. Knight]

WOW I read this and the first thing out of my mouth when I was through was wow... Thats all I can really say... this is a stunning piece and to think that it was written by a 14 year old is beyond amazing... this is real talent and I commend you on it... thanks for allowing us all the privavlidge to read such an amazing work...

Awesome job!

~Frances~

[Adam Jordan Turner]

This song is stunning. Very powerful, I admire it a lot. Great writing here, I love you use of imagery, and repetition with the three different scenarios. Very impressive for something written at 14, very incredible the understanding you had for what you believed in at such a young age. Great write! This is one of the better pieces I have read on cafe!

[mysticgmekeepr]

Welcome to writers Cafe. I like your poem/song....especially considering you were only 14. I was writing when I was that age too. I do believe of course that our bodies are dust and will return to dust...but I also believe their is no death for the spirit. I've lived long enough and experienced enough to be convinced there is a parallel world and it is very much alive. But that of course is just IMHO
Again, welcome!