Soul

I'm in a cafe with my soul
And now I try to find my goal
I feel lonely in this evening
In every life the rain must fall

The air of у I'm breathing
About my dear love I'm dreaming
God is crying worse than ever
This reality I'm leaving

These deep thoughts I try to sever
It is difficult, however
I feel close to this freezing rain
And I love this dodgy weather

But every time it stays the same
Was I to reach my goal humane?
And here I start to feel again
This beauty of my mental pain

Reviews

[Bear]

Question, did you plan the rhyming scheme or did it just work out that way? I ask because a chaotic rhyme scheme like this can detract from the natural flow of a poem, it is almost better to not rhyme at all.

Review: Nice imagery and good emotional depth, engaging and thought provoking, well done :~)

[Nikita Evgenyavich Adalov]

Thank you very much for reading, I planed this type of rhyme and I will try to write the poem without the scheme