WHEN YOUR CRIPPLED INSIDE

the picture that see is the sign for Ravenscraft Studios which I am part owner. The design is by Regina Jackson Stinnett part owner as well. https://ravenscraftstudios.weebly.com

When you're crippled inside

you gasp for breath

Screams fill your belly

that only you can hear

Conversations with yourself

debating over this and that

coming to terms another day

Seemingly endless turmoil

something inside

that you won't let out

Crawling, scratching

the power supreme

Giving energy to want

and need

Cradled beneath the agony

is your beauty unleashed

in all your light divine

Your eternal flame blazing

through the blackened night

To never again

let fade the light.

  copyrighted 2005 by RW Erskine

Author's Note

contact me at: [email protected]
or
visit us at Ravenscraft Studios
https://ravenscraftstudios.weebly.com

Reviews

[sette]

in experiencing emotional pain we feel crippled, it is like we are useless, the question is why me? and you try to come up with reasons to be your defense, to make you a little better, but when time comes that you have moved on then it is the only time you can tell yourself that you are whole again. nice poem and i can't help myself commenting.

[RW Erskine]

thank you Sette
you are a wonderful person

[sette]

how do you know that?

[RW Erskine]

because you were created

[sette]

that is so true thank you

[barleygirl]

Sorry to be a stickler, but the title & first line: "your" should be "you're" . . . (you are)
Other than that, I like the way you express this . . . especially how you describe grinding on stuff inside, hiding it, even tho it begs to be let out. Nicely true-to-life for us OCD's! *sigh!* Fondly, Margie

[RW Erskine]

thank you Margie,
I will fix that.

[Cherrie]

The flow and feel of this piece has 'The Raven' persona. It has a great use of both image and rhyme.

[RW Erskine]

hence Ravenscraft Studios
thank you Cherrie

[Chris]

Nice font selection for the Pic.

"Your" - you're? "Conversatons" - Conversations?

Some like no punctuation - others use it for clues of meaning, intent, timing, rhythm and so on...
if you don't use it you need to be clear and word choice as well as position mean everything.

I "feel" I have the gist of this one

[RW Erskine]

The font is our Ravenscraft Studios designed by us.
perhaps, but I never go by the rules.
read moreThe font is our Ravenscraft Studios designed by us.
perhaps, but I never go by the rules.
conversations was a typo, thanks.
"Your" - you're?......??

[Chris]

Rules are a personal choice... we live our own lives our way - if societies allow us.

[RW Erskine]

yes it is a choice

[Alfred Kukitz]

great intensity! you have an intuitive grasp of poetic utterances!

regards,
al

[RW Erskine]

thank you Alfred