Trapped

It’s hard to wake up from a nightmare, if you aren’t even asleep...

Swimming in the river of sorrow,
There is no need for me to follow,
The path of darkness the road so narrow,
Everything moving so fast like the whip of an arrow.

Hearing the shouts hearing the screams,
This house just isn’t for me,
All the fighting I have seen,
Terrified and angry I have been!

All my demons clawing at me,
Whereas my soul is ready to flee,
With my body breaking me,
For my fear is the key...

My soul all tangled and broken,
The devil I have awoken,
All the words have been spoken,
For my tears are the token!

I shall never be free...
For I have always been trapped,
In a body where my screams are unheard.

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

As the previous readers commented, your poem speaks to many who've also been "trapped." Some spectacular imagery in this piece. "All my demons clawing at me" is not only vivid but conveys the pain of suffering.

From my perspective (not a scholarly poet), some of the rhyming seemed forced and broken. For example, "With my body broken to three" leaves me wondering. What "three?" Did you use this number just because it rhymes. Again, it's just my opinion.

You're an exceptional writer. I'd encourage you, as others have done with me, to just write with your heart, and don't force the rhymes. Sometimes the most powerful and beautiful poems don't rhyme.

I look forward to reading your other work. Thanks for sharing your work.

[Justin]

That was extremely powerful!!! Sometimes we can't always escape our past but the best way is set a positive mind set knowing that u have learned from it!!!! Amazing job

[Great Aunt Astri]

OH I think many will identify with this, although they might not admit it. Sad to say, in this earthly world it is a fact that we have to live with the devils and demons. Luckily if you look, you can find comforts for the Soul all around. Although I think , to be honest, we are all 'trapped'. We just have to try to keep the 'nasties' at bay. Good write.

[Kevin Shea]

A very deep and touching poem, something I think many kids who've grown up in troubled homes can understand. I also love the rhyming!

[49k_jdys]

Wow, this is so great! It's dark in such a wonderful way. The imagery is beautiful as well. Amazing job!