Flowers of thine heart

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder,

Thou art the beauty in mine eyes,

If thou consent that I be bolder,

I’ll say thine beauty is the reason a man dies.

I’ll court thee with words and flowers,

Dying for thine restraint to slip,

Whether it’s under the night sky of meteor showers

Or my presentation of a lovely red Tulip.

I’ll scour the world for the flowers of thine heart,

Marvel at thine Daisy innocence and passionate Rose,

My blossoming lilac Iris - my first love thou art -

My eternal bliss, my Garden of Eden, I can feel I’m close.

One word blooms the flowers of thine heart: consummation.

One flower I fear more than death: the white Carnation.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Ah, The King's Language … I love it!
Hi, Ross,
What a pleasure it is to find this little gem of endearing romantic eloquence, composed from the star-blessed ink of your skillful pen.
Seems the lady of your desires is worthy of all an amorous encounter might portend, except, by fear … a bridal veil.
Well, who could blame a viral, warm-blooded young knave for so passionately pursuing the maiden faire, eh?
Your first line quote, though apt for the poem, is cliché. One might consider an original version of their own, such as:

"In the eye, beauty lies with its beholder."
(or)
"Unto the eye, beauty lies in its beholder."

I really dig the title!
Shared thoughts for your consideration:
L2: "Thou art the beauty in mine eyes," L3: "If thee consent that I be bolder," L5: "Thee, I'll court with words and flowers," and the only other critique I will offer is to rid as many repeat and filler words (and, the, I, to, me, I'll, [etc]) as possible, or replacing them with meaningful poetic words.

Whatever, in your skills, My Friend, I perceive the potential of a Master Artist … and, I thank you most gratefully for sharing such creative wonderment as you've laid so gracefully before us! ⁓ Richard

[R.M.C]

Like always, I am grateful for your review and consideration of my poems potential. I am glad that you liked it - it is one of my favorites of mine, though I can't say why :) The actual use of The King's language wasn't to benefit the actual wording of the poem, though I feel it is of benefit... I used it because flowers aren't used symbolically as much as they used to and I felt that Old English suited this perfectly. Once again, thank you for your considerate critique.

[nocool]

for me... this is sort of ok..
It is missing something.. and to be honest...
I am not sure what...

It just doesn't draw me in...
I am going to come back and reread this...

[R.M.C]

Thank you for reading it and I'm sorry it's not to your liking. If you come up with anything else please let me know.

[Curtis.Lenker]

Good work here. Very intense feeling. Great job.

[R.M.C]

Thanks a lot.