Sonnet Three- Tears

I wrote this when I had a miserable Sunday, and the resaon for my tears was was the same person over and over again.

Something salty touches my lips.
Emotion- extreme sadness,
or possibly just being upset
Causes the sensation.
Again the reason is you.
The falling salt water…
I do not like it,
I do not want it,
but it still happens.
Why do you control the water?
Why will you not stop the sensation?
Do you enjoy my pain?
If you love me,
will you please stop the falling salt water?

Author's Note

What did you think? Did it flow?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a beautiful and sad poem. Tears are necessary to relieve the pain. Your description and story was very good. Ending was perfect. Poem is excellent. Thank you.
Coyote

[Cassandra D.]

Wow...so many unanswered questions
I really enjoyed reading this.

[la Abeja]

I Liked it. I think there are many of us who've experienced this type of stress at one time or another. Keep up the good work.

[Rachael]

If your major concern is the flow, I think it flowed well. It was not bad; full of emotion. For simply writing about crying (and whatever you have behind that in your mind) you did well.