Very awesome read. I like how your writing flows together, to make me visualize everything that's going on. Many stories on here do that, and that's why most of the stories I read on here are good because you all are very talented and gifted, I visualized everything as I was reading it. Great writing. On to another topic. I have a website where I post my short stories, and blogs on. I also have ads on the website. I was wondering if you can go to my website, and click on any ad. you don't have to buy anything, I promise you won't get any viruses, all it is is google adsense on my website, and the more clicks on the ads, the more it helps grow my website. My website is bwlawson.com I appreciate it, that you would be taking part in helping my craft, business, product, and brand grow. Thank you!
i have dreams that did not stay...but not too many regrets....there are "what if's" but all the fulfilled and unfulfilled dreams have led me to where i am right now...and i am okay with that.
really like how you effortlessly weave words and rhyme...and i am not a big rhyme fan.
I truly loved this poem. It speaks the truth when I have a nice dream then wakes up from it. I just want to close my eyes and go back to the world of my dreams. WELL DONE
We can all relate to dreams and it is sad when some dreams don't last. Sometimes you wish to close your eyes and go back to sleep. Our world of dreams is so beautiful.
Nicely expressed.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you for understanding the essence of the poem :)
8 Years Ago
You are welcome Ria, and do have a look at my poems when you have the time.
i love the way you repeat the first line at the end - that is a very effective way of opening and closing the poem, leaving the reader with plenty of closure. dreams are a very clever thing to write about because everyone can relate to them, you have a real talent for words, nice job
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thanks for your helpful review. Im glad you liked it
Dreams. This work of yours can be related to easily. Dreams never stay. A dream can be realized with endeavour and diligence.
And, one cannot linger in dreamland forever- though all wish to. Very nice work. Keep writing.
I've always had very vivid dreams & when I was younger, I would wake up from such a dream & soooo wish I could go back to sleep to keep on dreaming that dream. I never thought to write about such a feeling. This poem shows such imagination & it's so interesting. It could apply to sleep-dreams or just our life dreams, too. Good job. Here's one little correction -- last line, second stanza: "ones pray" (noun & verb don't go together). Thanks for sharing.