Different

The way I used to be at school

I am different

I am the outcast

I am seperate from the rest

You have seen me 

But know me you do not

Talk to me you don't

But point and stare you do

I am different

I am the outcast

I am seperate from the rest

You have heard of me

But befriend me you don't

But giggle and laugh you do

I am different

I am the outcast

And get along we shall

 

Reviews

[Emma Lee]

*Claps* Bravo, well done.

I really love this poem, seeing as I'm an outcast too, with outcast friends. We all feel like this but we get along find by-ourselves and together. But it seems like you are a lonely outcast.

I have to agree with Drakana, it doesn't seem to flow, it seems a bit choppy. A also have to suggest that is should be broken up.

But, over all I just love it, I can feel the emotion and whatnot.

-~Emily~-

[Suicidal Teddybear]

this is really good this will help lots of people as it relates to so many people feeling like they aren't normal and being made fun of or shunned out

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is great. It makes you embrace yourself. I know that, I'm different, I look different. I understand and I don't give a crap what you think, but we're friends. That's great. (:

[rhadamanthys]

no way you're immortal Richard why did you not tell me this lol.

[Hush Hush]

it kind of reminds me of the many books I read about the outcasts , in american highschools, its a really strong poem...really real :)

[nono]

You have issues if you think being different is wrong. Being different would be better for the world!! YAY DIFFERENT PEOPLE! If more people were different and actually "were" themselves then the world would have so much less conflict. People should try getting a self check, before they check someone for being different. Nice job on this very well expressed.

[Drakana Wind]

I really like your manipulation of the syntax of this piece. I like how you use the same structure when talking about how the others treat you (eg. "Talk to me you don't") as you do in the last line when talking about how you treat the others; it really ties the piece together.

My only criticism lie in the structure of the poem itself. Ignoring the fact that this has no punctuation, the poem doesn't really seem to flow very smoothly. I really think that this poem should be broken up into stanzas. I would maybe break it up every three (or four, for the second one) lines. I think that might make it feel like it's not all in one breath.

This poem is written exceptionally well, in my opinion. You took a very common topic and expressed it with very simple, yet eloquent diction. It's difficult to pull something like that off without sounding cliche. For that, I commend you. Good work!

(P.S. For future reference, 'separate' is spelled with an 'a'.)

[Mara-J]

A job well done. I do think this poem is one of the most meaningful pieces I have ever read. I really do enjoy your work as well.

[Hayley]

There is some real depth in this piece of writing. It's like I can almost sense where you're coming from. But being different isn't always a bad thing; believing that you could become very successful.