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Even the last star vanished

Exhausted and perplexed

A life

Nothing but squint

Far enough from an easy breath

No rhythm plays

Only a home of constant pain

Who will hear the scream

This new face

Of new phase

Is hatred, betrayed, rejected.

When mistake were pleasurable choice

No shame to deny

If question is to fight for life

But it will be nothing

But a led on scurred soul

Plagued with acidic holes.

Shame will be still alive

As regret is the only highlight..

Reviews

[Arsh]

Excellent work as always you do!

One of my favorite writes. You`ve captured it very well. Enjoyed the choice of words as well. Yes, you`re right, the life`s really nothing, but a 'squint'. Neither it let the lovers live freely not let them die with peace. Ah - It`s all full of pleasure as well as piercing pain. Nice imagery!

Ps. You write very beautiful pieces!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Hey thnak you so much.It's really a beautiful surprise to see you again here reviewing .I'm really glad love : )

[Arsh]

Pleasure to give beautiful ones a surprise that they love enjoying with time. I`m glad myself to read your work after a long time. You are now growing in writing field indeed. I can find it through your latest posts. Keep it up sexy ;)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Hugs!!!! :*

[Arsh]

I`m very creepy. Oh, yeah.. you may call me stalker as well. But sorry, I can`t control myself not to ask you for 'kisses' so... baby, where`s your kiss.. by the sides of your pretty warmed 'Hugs'? ;p

[Lenah Mehzabin]

haha and who told u I'm not ? ;)

[Arsh]

Ahaan, So, it means, you too a creeper or stalker? Sounds interesting. It`s seemed we both made to get collide each other one-day. Aww... i`m getting so erotic on ya. Aw... I hurt you. Lol (Kidding)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

LOL ! where u get so much ideas -__- for me it's so hard haha

[Arsh]

Uumm.. I steal it from your heart. Aw... i`m a 'thief' either by the sides of being creepy and stalky! Haha

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Lenah Mehzabin]

nd so I love ya 222

[Arsh]

Loved your move you took to get inside the heart!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

sure ;)
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[Arsh]

Hahah ... You funny ;)

[Dinesh Kumar]

Excellent work
Really enjoyed

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a Lot !

[Riya patel]

Hi really nice piece of work. Words are not enough to praise this
"Only a home of constant pain
Who will hear the scream."
I loved it

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot Ria ! really an honour

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

As regret is the only highlight..I wish to see you in Twilight

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks for a beautiful review :')

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Welcome for your beautiful poem :)

[Cobblestone Traveler]

My favorite line from this piece "Plagued with acidic holes". Powerful emotions. I enjoyed this read!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank You dear (sorry for late reply)

[kyam]

Oh my, what feelings! Absolutely fantastic. The devastating feelings.....written so well. Please keep writing, you need to be heard. I felt the pain........Kyam

[Lenah Mehzabin]

That was really nice.Thank you so much ! (sorry for late reply)

[Elie Marie]

"plagued with acidic holes"
Nicely done :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot !! dear :) (sorry for late reply)

[Demii]

I enjoyed reading this, its easy to relate to and that's what grabs be, the choice of words went very well with it, and the flow was good, I'll be looking at more of your stuff !

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thanks a lot dear.Really sweet of you ! (sorry for late reply)

[Tasfia Islam]

Its really a great poem... :) loved reading it

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much love : ) glad to see you again !!!