Treasure Hunt

----------------------        1835 (5th june) ---------------------------------

In a hurried mission for fiend’s treasure

Over the allay

Miles away

From the darkest city “death”

There is a mount “Teeth”

Carrying secrets " unknown blaze

 

So

Soon we  started our truck

In highest speed it was running fast

We have to reach

Before iluminado touching the youngest peak

Venus will be waiting near it

As soon as the white stone,

One that is placed in a hidden hole

Will be removed and thrown in sea

The God of love will kiss the bare feet

Of the youngest one- said before in this blue print.

 

The shadow will open a door

Having stairs.. horrible and cold.

 

Careful!

The ancient pet may awake

Feeding itself “our”

Flashes

 Judging the symbolic  figures " drawn

It can be a Dragon

Or .. Lucifer’s son

Guarding his jewels

Infinite wealth

We are dreaming of ..

 

 

We slowly walked

There it is!

Wave of black water

Shining.

 

In time

We touch the silver door

Before his snore

Stops the knot.

 

Bang!

Burst of light

Blinded our eyes

We  stared in shock

It’s a palace

Of precious gold

Never any human eye witnessed this look

Pure heaven

Now  we  own !!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Well , I don't know how it is :( as I never wrote any story in poetry !
Please share your opinion :)

Reviews

[The StoryTeller]

It's an interesting poem... if you wanted it to be story in poem form you maybe should have added a little more detail and made it a little more like a short story... otherwise, good job :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Then it would have turned into a story and not a poem :( But i m thinking about increasing it's length

[The StoryTeller]

True... I mean, you can make it more into a short story and still have it be a poem, it just takes practice and then finesse. (Your own style would probably be able to add your own finesse to it that I've seen in some of your other work) And that might be a good idea. :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Ya i agree with you I will sur try to make it better by adding few more thoughts !

[The StoryTeller]

Sounds great! I'll be looking forward to it!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good tale in the poem with a positive ending. I liked the artwork, gave strength to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much Coyote ! I m really glad u liked it :))

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Cool Girl]

Omg!!! Loved it!!! It's super unique:)

[Writer_next_door]

I really liked this poem. It is written in such a way that I was able to envision the treasure hunters' trip as if I was on it as well. A thrilling poem well written!
Well done!

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much for enjoying ! I'm happy now : )