My Soul In Rhyme

Over the forest

Beneath the stars

I made a conclusion of love

Where the poetic eyes hovers

When the bird takes lift in dim air

When rain touches the leaves

Soaks the mahogany, thus

Thousand pen paints its beauty, I dropped

My heart there.

 

Adore how their rhyme flows

In the lake where my heart sop

And

That’s when I know

I’m hiding from the world

At a certain rune

Entering souls

Just to fill the blank space

Of one I own.

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Author's Note

My name : Lenah
( For the book poem compilation )

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

I knew you would be a gem :-) This poem just is my cup of coffee(because i hate tea) ... :p.. Vivid imagery,underlying meaning to your words.Good metaphor of flowing brook.... Everything screams perfection here .You have got magic in your words. its sweet and innocent.Let your talent be untouched sweetie. Stay raw.. and love TS :).. ~xoxo~

~Sophy

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you soo much Sophy ! :-* :) ;)))

[Sophy Freebirds]

;-):-* Pleasure n***a

[Chris]

"Thousand pen paints it’s beauty," - A thousand pens paint its (or it's) beauty?

I've found if you reread your work - slowly, verbatim, and aloud - you catch most stumbles and find where the tones of your voice need to be.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Oh oops sorry for grammatical errors , I will fix them .thanks

[Zoe Goldman]

Can I please have your last name? Don't worry; it is just for the book.

[Elie Marie]

I loved this at the title.
And loved it more as I read on.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much Elie . I'm glad that u liked it ... : )

[Lupus Kaos]

Interesting poem and beautiful in a dark way, in my opinion. Made me think and think again about a couple of things, "just to fill the blank space of one I own"...

[Arsh]

So, Red one.. mind if I ask you, what're ya doing out there lying down ov`r the tuft of grasses making them all numbed allowing a queeny crown rested ov`r your hairy head? I kinda loosing my breath having you in that gesture.

Well, loved the poem. Kinda deep imagery you've come up with. Every corner of my heart adored the great expressive write with the pleasure of ecstasy itself. Sounds good.. doesn't it? Of course, it does.

... would be leafing thought your poetry pages today again. Seemed you've written quiet impressive poetry's in a day! I must taste you.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem dear poet.
"Over the forest
Beneath the stars
I made a conclusion of love
Where the poetic eyes hovers
When the bird takes lift in dim air
When rain touches the leaves
Soaks the mahogany, thus
Thousand pen paints it’s beauty, I dropped
My heart there."
The words above. Sweet, tender and create vision of perfect place for the writers. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much coyoty ! for your great appreciation .I'm glad that you enjoyed it ! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[armin]

Great work, I enjoyed it.

Poetic majesty is a pleasure
and it's flow with rhymes is even better.
I liked how you painted the picture, either
it flows effortlessly like sea water..

A small rhyming poem for your effort, lenah. Oh ya how can I forget these lines you wrote it very well,
When rain touches the leaves
Soaks the mahogany, thus
Thousand pen paints it’s
beauty, I dropped
My heart there.

Keep it up.
armin. ...

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so so much armin ! I'm glad that you liked it :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow, your poem has such a positive vine and very uplifting… no one wears their heart on their sleeve like that of a poet.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good, I love in particularly this line:

When rain touches the leaves
Soaks the mahogany, thus
Thousand pen paints it’s beauty, I dropped
My heart there

Very good metaphor use and imagery. Very well done. :) Rudi

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Thank you so much Rudi for your nice view .It's an honour :) I m glad that u liked it ! :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure and keep writing, have a good day. :) Rudi