The One Survivor's Bad Temper

    

 

 

 

 

 

 

   I sat in front of the news reporters camara. I start to cry. So many memories, so much pain. Why do I need to be here? Infront of everyone and explain why I made it out and no one else did! They will probaly just call me a killer and lock me in jail, I thought SOMEONE else had to make it out! I feel alone. "I should have known I should have asked for the person who was having the party..." I started, I was scared, everyone's parents/parent was in the room their eyes beaming at me, seeing if what I say matches what they THINK is their child is like they know SO much about!

  

 

   I look for my parents, but they arn't there. I cling to my seat. Why am i so scared? I stutter like a mindless idiot. The parents gaze at me. The News reporter is getting annoyed I realized and cry louder then before. I mourn for my friends that died in the terrible party and wish that I died along side of them. She is crying because she killed them! a woman's voice echos around the room. My head turns to the lady who whispered it. Her eyes look scared and helpless, her body terrembles when I stand up to yell at her. " WHY WOULD I KILL MY FRIENDS YOU STUPID IDIOT!? THEY WERE THE ONLY PEOPLE I COULD TRUST! YOU WORTHLESS GOSSIPING IDIOT! WHAT? DO YOU EVEN HAVE A MIND!" I scream with tears rolling down my face. The lady starts heading for the door. I have a temper and not a patient one eather. My eyes follow her staring her down so she feels helpless. The room turns quiet a little to quiet... Great  I thought, great first impression. So many parents, they don't know me. They  know nothing about me. They don't even know their own children.

Reviews

[Twilight]

Well, this is emotional and concise. You have managed to express the confusion and angst of your protagonist very well, Weaza! I have the impression that she is a young teenager, perhaps? At the end of this opening, she is practically hysterical! What a dire scenario, in which she seems to be trapped!

From such a negative and awful situation, surely there is some hope for your protagonist? It is the dialogue and some of the main character's fears, which led me to conclude that she is a young teenager. I will review your next chapter, and find out what happens next!

[Philosophile. (Maddy)]

I like the narrator and the idea of this, this is so unique! Aside from a few grammatical errors, this was really good. This really hooks the reader and has them wanting more.