Breathless

Your eyes leave me

haunted

Your touch leaves me

cold

I tried to escape you

but I'm trapped in your

hold

I adore your breathless 

whisper

I hate your bittersweet 

glance

While we fight and make endless

love in our dead end

romance

I love the way we fight when we tangle

together

You bite and I punch while we

fight to the

death

I hold to you tightly while we

gasp for each 

breath

Reviews

[Brett Pritchard]

Very nice piece. I like the way it displays the duality of a fruitless love affair. Nice piece.

[unsavable_soul]

Love this one too,
very beautiful descriptions, flow to match and it fits with personal emotions like a glove. I must remember to come by more often. I don't want it to sound cliche or bad cause i thought it was a great scene in a movie, but this piece reminds me a bit of the feel from the poem read in 10 things I hate about you, good movie, great poem you got here.

"I adore your breathless
whisper
I hate your bittersweet
glance"

While the flow separated a bit here to me the duality and opposing nature of these lines is great. I know many can relate here but it is ever true for myself. i must say you have a knack for this love stuff huh?
Sincerely
Christopher
100/100

[Shaun Payton]

When emotion comes through poetry, it is an experience, some can relate to the love/hate aspect of relationships. nicely done!

[richom]

Since you were kind enough to review my first submission three days ago, I'm reading your work. I very much enjoy this. It has excellent rhyming, vivid descriptions, and a smooth flow.
I just posted my second poem ("The School Bus Revolt"). It is rhymed and metered, but the topic is very different from "Breathless."

[Troy Henson]

I enjoy the flow in this. It's real and for me a common imagery.
Well done

[lovejulez03]

Random search. Beautiful poem. Heart wrenching and raw, yet written so well. Thank for you sharing your talent :)

[QuietlyCrash]

oh my gosh, thank you for taking the time to pop over and review this. I appreciate it.

[Cool Handless Luke]

Great flow and rhyme scheme. One of the poems you like to read out loud and hear it! True sign that it's a good one!

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you for your kind review!

[SyberRose]

Nicely penned with emotion...you might want to edit (I hold you tightly)...Enjoyed..:)

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you so much for your review. I appreciate it. Oh and oops I keep meaning to fix that ha.

[Mina Salva]

I love it c:

[The Girl That Let You G..]

A wonderful description of a bittersweet relationship. Nice write :)