Degenerate Beauty Queen

Based off 'This Is What Makes Us Girls' By Lana Del Rey

"The prettiest in the crowd that you ever did see. Ribbons in our hair and our eyes gleamed mean. A freshmen generation of degenerate beauty queens"- Lana Del Rey 

I gazed in the mirror 

at the girl I despise

With volume in her smile

and loathing in her eyes

With scars on her heart

and a blade for a tongue 

She raged a war with her mind

that only the devil would've won

She was torn from her throne

ripped at the fragile seams

With cruel fate this

is what became of our beloved

beauty queen

Reviews

[littlemiss56]

Well described, straight to the point poem. The wording is fantastically visual :D

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Powerful and in so few words... "With scars on her heart and a blade for a tongue", that line spoke volumes. Well done!

[ron]

Short and powerful. It is an insight to woman I never knew before. Thank you.

[Angi]

'looking in the mirror at the girl I despise' ...and the rest of the descripion of herself just tears at me with self loathing. What happened to this girl to make such bitterness course through her. The last stanza makes me think an event happened to turn her from herself. Angi~

[QuietlyCrash]

I just thought of those typically bitchy (pardon my french) pretty girls that are unkind and cruel to others. I like to think that they are just upset with the way the mirror spits venom back at them the way they spit it at others. Thank you for your review, it means a lot.

[NotNobody]

We are our own worst critics. This is really good, I like it.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you, for your kind review :)

[nfuschetti]

This is a really great poem. It is so lovely and dark at the same time. I think the middle lines are the strongest (also, just a note when you say "ripped at the fragile seems--I think you mean 'seams'). But my favorite lines are "With scars on her heart and a blade for a tongue. That is really strong. I think you could make the first stanza a little stronger, but of course, it's just a suggestion. Overall though, this poem is amazing!

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you so much, yeah it was supposed to be "seams"oops. I'm so glad you enjoyed it though. Thank you for the feedback!

[Jack...]

Very cool.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you!

[Jayden Ireton]

This is brilliantly written. The rhyme and format is great. Good job.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you! :)

[Sourav]

Very well written.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thanks so much!