Asleep

I hate you. I shouldn't despise you with such a passion but I can't help but loathe every single bit of your memory.Without you, I'm lost searching for meanings in everything you've left behind, I'm screaming for answers fully knowing you chose to leave me in the most final and irrevocable way. There isn't a single day that goes by when I don't think back to that night. I see your eyes closed shut, the scarlet running from your ears and mouth, I see the gun in your hand and the first thing that comes out of my mouth is "come back". How could you do this to me? I needed you. I need you. I don't want to live my life wondering what could have became of yours. I hate you. I love you. I miss you. I'm lost. One day, I'll learn to deal with the gaping hole your death has catapulted into my life. One day, I'll have realized that I was lucky to have loved you and know that you loved me. But one day isn't close enough, for now I will settle for picking up the pieces of your scattered remnants hoping to find you wandering around in my dreams. 

Author's Note

This is my first real story so could you please be review and tell me how I could improve my writing.

Reviews

[writ rajat]

nice thinking and scintillating story

[Sally Sparrow]

This is very powerful, I fully congratulate you. One of my best friends almost took his own life, and I cried for days just because he even thought about it. Because of your writing I'm beginning to realize how real this truly is. Thank you.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you so much, it's very difficult to even imagine someone planning to take their own life and it's just plain depressing. I've spent many nights just thinking about it, so I had to write this and get it out of my head before it destroyed it.

[I.N.Kelly]

This piece seems more like a poem then a short story and it's very well written. It's very touching and bursting with emotion. Thank you for sharing.
~Best wishes
Kelly

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you so much for that :) have a lovely day.

[LostSoul2014]

I read your writing and it touched me deeply. I feel for you as I have lost someone dear to me from suicide several years back. I hope you are able to pull through this difficult time and find peace once again. With the exception of a few slight punctual errors, your writing is very good. I felt the emotion whilst reading.

[QuietlyCrash]

Thank you so much.