The Feel

This is in crappy format. I wrote it on my phone. I couldn't wait to write it. It was eating at me.

The Feel

 

The feel of a huge wall

Falling on you

With no warning

No signs or thoughts

Then taking all the beathe

You have inside

And you struggle..

Everyone around you

Feels you , but dont see

Because you dont want to show

Any emotion because your scared

Trying to be strong and not break

But you do anyway

Because the feelings 

Kept inside you

And you cant fight it

All you can do is cry

When no one is around

Because your suppose to be strong

I wont break, i wont fall

Not around any of you 

Just alone and only me can see

I find hope and faith

That everything will be ok

But just the process of

Going through it

Is what beats me..

Reviews

[Patrick Ramsey]

Loved the last three lines. The poem built up tension to those, it seemed. A few spelling / grammatical errors are a little distracting.

[Chris38]

I know this feeling. THis pom switches wonderfuly, starting out on a bleak note but at the end there is a feeling of strength at survival which is very empowering.

[Stacey Watts]

I like the wonderful strength in this piece. The words flow well. It seems as though you really opened up on this one to express how you feel. Very expressive.