My Walls

A dear friend of mine inspired me to write this. I've been wanting to, the words just came together after reading his.

 

My Walls

As I sail alone, once again

The sand has never felt so deep

I’m drowning in the ocean

As my walls are building

They aren’t breaking

Just grower higher

So no one can climb over

I’ve had so many break them down

But most of them just kept

The pieces lying there

I need someone to break it down

And pick up every piece

Make me trust and believe this time

I want to stick to one

I don’t want to keep starting over

The whole process again

Then it ends to be nothing

Just hurt, cries, and another wall

Why is it I’m always standing alone

On this battle field of love

I always got my guard up

But somehow something always gets through

I want someone who will love me for me this time

And mean every word they say

Because I can’t take the lies anymore

I’ve been missing something in me

For a very long time,

Its time to find it

Where ever it may be

But till then,

My walls are staying high

And they are stronger then ever

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

Sounds like you are not being honest
with men and with yourself.
Do you answer nice overtures from men
who probably feel the same ? Do you ?
Are you a committed friend ? If not, how can
you expect anything to start ?
Do you just rule everyone out without being
even friendly ? Think about it .

This is an excellent poem. The writer makes
her point, even if it is fantasy, she takes the
reader directly into her confidence.

Excellent writing .

------ Eagle Cruagh

[Jeff Miller]

Do not imprison yourself

[Antonio Valentino]

The stronger the wall the harder they fall. Sometimes all it takes is a lingering glance, or a hand on a shoulder to push them over. The wall is there to protect, but it can also isolate. Don't build them so big, that when that time comes, you can't even break out yourself.

Wonderful Kylie. Here's a hammer, just in case.
Antonio

[Hippy]

i really didnt like this it was all over the place on a boat then in the sand then in the ocean then walls in the ocean in you contradict your self a handful of times i really consider changing this alot and sticking to one place i just felt so lost but then again its your art and im just the mean critic here dont take me not likeing this to seriously im sure someone else will

[Tate Morgan]

To0 give your heart is the only way

[Poeticpiers]

protective walls become a prison. you can't win unless you dare to try

[kbjami]

Well . . . I'm not in the right mood for really reviewing any poem.
yet I do love this piece.
Yet I just screwed up big time.
Just look at my most recent poem and you'll see.
I feel bad for not being much help reviewing.

[Bud]

For every wall built, there can be a door installed to get through it... Outstanding piece.

[Bette]

i disagree with E.C i think this was honest, i have read more of your pieces and they all are talking about you guarding yourself, just because you watch your back doesn't make you a horrible friend or dishonest.

[R J Askew]

Hmm, I am against walls on two counts. 1) they show fear 2) there is always a way rounnd, under, over, or through them. Be the huntress.

[HorrorMaster]

Very amazing poem. I love your poems.