Love In Return

Love In Return
I hate to feel that
All love is hurt
It always ends that way
Its why I don’t want to fall
All the promises that are made
Never last and they get shattered
I keep pulling away
But no one knows that I am
I make you think your getting close
But your so far away from this heart
I want this word called love
But who can I give my love to
Without them ruining it completely
I am cautious with every step I take
I won’t walk right inside you
Thinking its all going great
Because all its going to do
Is turn this smile upside down
And that’s what love is doing
I have never been happy in it
Maybe its because the people I’ve been with
But what makes you any different
All I want is to feel love
But who will give it in return..

Reviews

[Elanra]

who doesnt... thats a nicely expressed flow of emotions.. good pen and you can also listen to your heart too.. thas an important thing.


maybe you should only work on your rhymes a bit.. there are times when writing poetry that you dont need rhymes at the end of each line bcus it rhymes inside.. when you read it. yours is half-like that but not completely so... maybe only a little work on the rhymes.

[deeps]

isn't this the truth, I can really fell this write here,
Don't we all want that.
Well expressed and stated write here!