Loneliness

Loneliness
I’m laying in my bed
All alone again
The loneliness swallows me
My tears are drowning me
Fears enter my entire body
Sadness runs through my veins
I don’t think about the smile
That I hold best tonight
No one hears my cries
Because its just better that way
I try to fight this feeling
But its so hard when
I want arms to hold me
All through the night
This loneliness is my fault
Because I won’t let anyone close enough..

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is indeed sad. It is not only sad because of the events that caused it,
but because the person stands off from others. Its always most emotional when
a person knows how to solve their problems, but cant for their own reasons.
kudos.

I love the intro on lines 3,4,5. You had a great choice of words to show that the
person is being overpowered. This creates a perfect balancing act when combined
with the fact that the person isn't ready to change this situation.

[Banished]

aaahhhhh this is sad :(
the feeling of being lonely absolutely sucks and is one of the worst emotions to feel. Especially if you know the reason is because you're afraid to let people get close to you.
But, the good thing about being lonley is that you can eventually overcome it.
The feeling doesnt last forever, cause eventually another lonely person will walk by who you will feel comfortable getting close with. and then POOF. No more loneliness.
I'll stop with my annoying optimism now.

This poem expressed your feelings well and was wonderfully written.
nice job =]

-Banished

[deeps]

This is so sad, i can feel this one from your soul,
Wonderful emotion!

[Magdelena]

Sad and so true for many.. I really like this! It showed great emotion. Pulling one in and making them feel, remember, once upon a time of a moment when we all refuse to let someone in to hold us..

Nice indeed..

Mag xx

[Jess.]

Wow.
I love this, and can relate to it.
Very well written.