Deep Within

Deep Within
I haven’t cried in awhile..
I’ve been hiding away
The tears that are falling
Just hasn’t been me..
I wish I knew why
They are leaking out of me
My heart is hurting tonight
When there isn’t a reason for it to
Unless its buried deep within
And I’m too scared to release it..
Because I hate feeling this way
Where sadness overpowers happiness
When all I feel inside is empty
If someone were to open my chest
They would find a piece of my heart missing
All I need is that one little piece
To fix this feeling I hold
My heart is sore,
Someone just needs to massage it
And it will all be okay
Just reach a hand out
And touch it always
As I get to the end of this poem
The tears are dried up on my cheeks
I won’t let another drop hit the table..
 

Reviews

[Haifa]

Sad poem but you wrote it so well. I hate that feeling which you were written about, it comes to me much with lots of sadness and loneliness but we need to get over it by talking or by writing as you do.
Well done

[John Stussy]

You let your emotions out well in this poem, displaying your thoughts clearly and openly. The poem itself seemed to shed tears until you gave it that final resolve at the end where you decide to be strong. Just be careful to not grow cold from the lack of release. Tears may sting from time to time, but they're also very warm, they can thaw out any coldness that might have grown deep within.

[Bud]

This is a really emotional write, Kylie. Great work of art. Keep on writing.

[Brianna Brie]

When all I feel inside is empty
If someone were to open my chest
They would find a piece of my heart missing

This moved me so deeply. It is full of emotion, and written nicely!

[deeps]

Such emotions you have put into this write,
so wonderfullly expressed.

[Avoiry]

Very sad as that tight feeling is never a fun one. Your writing is highly emotional and it tugs at your reader making them find a sense of empathy. The flow of the writing is good and the lack of stanza suits in this poem. Well done.

[THE LOST ROSE]

I amazed how much poetry spills out of you. And each piece you write has passion, its speak loudly and they are thought provoking for us readers. I think there is a novel in you. This poem helped me see the pain and the truth in your process. I think we all have had that moment and the tribute to you is that you saw poetry in it! Another Standing "O" in my book.

[Magdelena]

Nice.. Emotions that are clear, sad, yanking out the old heart.. The deep feeling of helplessness is there, all in all this was a tear-jerker, that I found intense and deep..

Mag xx