Young Love

This is about a friend of mine.

Young Love
He’s lost himself in love
He has two woman that
Have taken his heart on a ride
They are both beautiful and sweet
One of the lady’s lives four hours away
He met her through work
And have become great friends
They both feel something for each other
But the distance gets in the way
The other lady lives far as well
She was in a relationship with another man
But decided it wasn’t working out
So she left him and came to him
He opened his arms to her
But she doesn’t know what she wants
She’s scared to take a chance
And leaves him so confused
Which girl does he choose?
Without hurting the other one..
He puts his heart on the line
For both of these woman
He comes to me
And asks what he should do
Its his decision and choice
I’m not his heart or his mind
But I just wish they could see what I see
Then they wouldn’t be
Letting a good man slip away..

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

How about this for an answer:

All parties woo each other on line for a given
amount of time----It will soon become clear
who is far away and who is near.

This conversational piece is ezquisite in form
and substance. I like the same thing----just sit
down and discuss the problem.

My rating -----100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh

[THE LOST ROSE]

I really didn't take this as a poem. I love the subject you chose and I felt like you were conversating with me. Now if your intent was to create a piece like that then congrats you wrote a poem and I felt like you were right in front of me having this conversation. I've been that man in the middle as well one time. So I really felt this.

[Bud]

This is a Great piece touching a common subject matter. How the heart does hurt. There is a time for one to make the decision as to which one shall hold the title of ownership. I hope your friend makes that decision soon, for his own sake. Keep up the Astounding work, Kylie.

[lindsay]

Oh, how meaningful. I think this happens to many people. One person torn between two others. You expressed his problem quite amazingly and you showed his confusion that he must have. A good write!