I�m In Pieces

I’m In Pieces
I always find myself here
So lost and confused
All I keep feeling is
So alone and forgotten
My heart is in pieces
And I don’t know how
To get them back together
I don’t need anyone
To help glue them back
Because I’ve tried that
This is my personal situation
Don’t ask me what’s wrong,
I can’t figure that out for myself
Only I can make myself whole
Why is it so hard for me to do?
Because nothing works anymore
Tape becomes lose
Glue is messy
Nails just hurt
And  band aids don’t stick
So I’ll just keep the pieces
Scattered in my body
Because that’s where they belong..
 

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

I am a big fan of dark sorrowful poetry. In this I seem some similarities to dark poems I have written. Without knowing whether you are open to constructive criticism, I will only say that the fundamentals are very good, and with a little tightening around the edges this would be quite a short, knockout poem. If you want in depth criticism, feel free to message me.

The idea of being alone with your pieces because none of the solutions you try work is one I sympathize with. Good job conveying the emotions.

[~Mary Ann~]

Hugs... the heart is strong and shall heal. An amazing person and soul lies within... A talented inker.. with a gift for expression. The heart may be in pieces but will be able to be put back together... Believe.. it shall come true.

[kewlbluetiger]

I would say this poem is close to being lyrical (a great song!). I can't tell you why I really feel that way, perhaps it's the directness of the language. I like how you clearly conveyed the idea that your heart is your own to mend. I think many of us feel that way after a relationship coming to a close. I usually do go-there with punctuation in a free verse poem, but I think the reader might need it with this one. Punctuation indicates to us when you want us to pause, breath, or read straight through. It gives you the writer a lot of control on how the reader will flow through your poem. Very enjoyable write. I love your work very much. Keep up the fantastic work!

[Bud]

I think that you are well on your way to putting the pieces together, again. A broken heart is one of the most difficult things to mend, save for a broken spirit. This is a Remarkable emotionally charged poem. Keep up the Outstanding works of art, Kylie! Thanks for sharing such a personal piece!

[Travis Tweed]

Beautifully poignant poem. I know exactly the situation your describing, but only a true poet could articulate such a thing. Good Write, enjoyable read.