I’m In Pieces
I always find myself here
So lost and confused
All I keep feeling is
So alone and forgotten
My heart is in pieces
And I don’t know how
To get them back together
I don’t need anyone
To help glue them back
Because I’ve tried that
This is my personal situation
Don’t ask me what’s wrong,
I can’t figure that out for myself
Only I can make myself whole
Why is it so hard for me to do?
Because nothing works anymore
Tape becomes lose
Glue is messy
Nails just hurt
And band aids don’t stick
So I’ll just keep the pieces
Scattered in my body
Because that’s where they belong..
I am a big fan of dark sorrowful poetry. In this I seem some similarities to dark poems I have written. Without knowing whether you are open to constructive criticism, I will only say that the fundamentals are very good, and with a little tightening around the edges this would be quite a short, knockout poem. If you want in depth criticism, feel free to message me.
The idea of being alone with your pieces because none of the solutions you try work is one I sympathize with. Good job conveying the emotions.
I have both pondered and experienced the broken emotions you share.......at the tender age of 50 moons.....I selfishly dream of a lady to complete my trip........to compliment my prose.....to inspire deepest feelings of peace and satisfaction.......Kylie.........I truly believe it's never been under my control......the muse I seek is God given....angelic........predestined.........she shall arrive if I am meant to meet her..........and if she does not.....then it was never meant to be anyway........Life is fragile and soulful........it's all about soul for me today.....I love your style and your sincerity.....your raw honesty.......May you always write in smiles and sleep in complete peace my new friend......
.. Man this is the perfect poem to describe the many hardships i've been through. Your emotions in this piece of art is marvelous. I related to it well... KUDOS! 8D
I connect with the emotions of this poem on many levels. You do a great job at conveying your feelings and express so that your readers can connect and sympathize with you! Good Job!
This is a sad and heartfelt poem. Lots of people get their hearts broken and first they look for help. But then they realize only they can only heal themselves. It takes time to figure it out, but once you do I think you heal fast, thats just my thought though.
Hello, my is kylie, I havent been on here for a long time, i haven't written in years so bare with me. Reading all my old stuff brings back a lot of memories. I have a husband and twin girls, i would.. more..